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A person's worth nowadays seen to be judge according to social status and material possessions. old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust no longer seen important. To what extent agree or disagree? v.2

A person's worth nowadays seen to be judge according to social status and material possessions. old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust no longer seen important. v. 2
Today, this argument is true, that ancient cultures qualities does not matter for long ago like; honesty and kind-hearted and hope. Whereas the individual judged to way of social standard and dressing sense as well as expressing inspiration. I agree to this staenent, because money and time convenience were major factor in disappear old materials. At the first glance, people were investigate to social behavior as well as new fashion trend whereas, at the previous time, the individual emitting crucial factor such as; honourable and good moral values. Due to this reason, most individual under the effect of achieving higher status in the society. To prefer money is highly effective for people to change their psychology. For instance, the Hindustan time was conducted survey found that in the 21st century 8 out of ten were relocate to self-respect and kindness in the community so that, people show interest to acquire a quite few of economy. Secondly, in the current situation show that person have been lack of time because, they were busy in the hectic schedule like royal family and celebrity and so on which is also effecting towards encourage money and show self- behaviour for other. Hence, loss a lot of honesty with each other. Crime is good illustration of this is, most people show selfless to acquire property anyone. To conclude, no doubt, at the present time most people were show keen interest to represent their status that' s why, a truth is mitigate and soar- up greediness in the world.
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Today
, this argument is true, that ancient cultures qualities does not matter for long ago like; honesty and kind-hearted and hope. Whereas the individual judged to way of social standard and dressing sense
as well
as expressing inspiration. I
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agree
to this
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staenent
,
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because
money and
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time
convenience were major factor in disappear
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old
materials.

At the
first
glance,
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people
were investigate to social behavior
as well
as new fashion trend whereas, at the previous
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time
, the individual emitting crucial factor such as;
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honourable
and
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good
moral values. Due to this reason, most individual under the effect of achieving higher status in the society. To prefer money is
highly
effective for
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people
to
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change
their psychology.
For instance
, the Hindustan
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time
was conducted
survey found that in the 21st century 8 out of ten were
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relocate
to self-respect and kindness in the community
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so
that,
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people
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show
interest to acquire a quite few of economy.

Secondly
, in the
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current
situation
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show
The verb 'have' is plural. Did you mean: "that person has"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
that person have
been lack of
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time
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because
, they were busy in the hectic schedule like royal family and celebrity and
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so
on which is
also
effecting towards encourage money and
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show
self-
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behaviour
for other.
Hence
, loss
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a lot of
honesty with each other. Crime is
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good
illustration of this is, most
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people
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show
selfless to acquire property anyone.

To conclude
, no doubt, at the present
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time
most
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people
were
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show
keen interest to represent their status
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that&
#039; s why, a truth is
Consider using a past participle here: "mitigated".
mitigate
and soar- up greediness in the world.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A person's worth nowadays seen to be judge according to social status and material possessions. old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust no longer seen important. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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