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A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? v.3

A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? v. 3
I am from Saint-Petersburg, Russia. It is a very beautiful city that attracts many people every year. My close friend is going to move here after her graduation. She already found a job and she asked me to help her with an apartment. Knowing her very well I think I can enumerate the majority of things she will like and dislike about my city. First of all, I believe she will like a huge amount of museums, theatres, movie theatres, etc. My friend is from a small town, so, she can not enjoy all these benefits at her native town. Secondly, it seems to me that she will like the way people live here. The pace of life is much faster here than in a small town. People are always in a hurry, they try to catch a bus, and then they run to the nearest subway station, go to an office, meet new people, etc. Also, I think my friend will like people here. They are very friendly and ready to offer a help to those in need. She will also like the huge garden in front of the parliament house and the people who come to visit there. We have some attractive rivers here and I’m sure she will enjoy the calm environment and sweet breeze of these rivers. Finally, I’m planning to take her to a nearby restaurant that serves  lots of uncommon and delicious foods. Unfortunately, my friend will not surely like some things. As a result of a huge amount of cars and factories,   the air is polluted here. One more thing she will definitely not like is the weather. It is quite humid here. However, I think she will also like the public transport here. The bus services are run by the Government and it is quite regular. If one in a hurry he can take a taxi, which also is quite cheap and provide a good transport. In conclusion, I believe that in spite of all mentioned above disadvantages she will like this city.
I am from Saint-Petersburg, Russia. It is a
very
beautiful
city that attracts
many
people
every year. My close
friend
is going to
move
here after her graduation. She already found a
job and
she asked me to
help
her with an apartment. Knowing her
very
well I
think
I can enumerate the majority of things she will like and dislike about my city.

First of all
, I believe she will like a huge amount of museums,
theatres
, movie
theatres
, etc. My
friend
is from a
small
town,
so
, she can not enjoy all these benefits at her native town.
Secondly
, it seems to me that she will like the way
people
live
here. The pace of life is much faster here than in a
small
town.
People
are always in a hurry, they try to catch a bus, and then they run to the nearest subway station, go to an office,
meet
new
people
, etc.
Also
, I
think
my
friend
will like
people
here. They are
very
friendly and ready to offer a
help
to those in need. She will
also
like the huge garden in front of the parliament
house
and the
people
who
come
to visit there. We have
some
attractive rivers here and I’m sure she will enjoy the calm environment and sweet breeze of these rivers.
Finally
, I’m planning to take her to a nearby restaurant that serves
 
lots of uncommon and delicious foods.

Unfortunately, my
friend
will not
surely
like
some
things.
As a result
of a huge amount of cars and factories,
 
the air
is polluted
here. One more thing she will definitely not like is the weather. It is quite humid here.
However
, I
think
she will
also
like the public transport here. The bus services
are run
by the
Government
and it is quite regular. If one in a hurry he can take a taxi, which
also
is quite
cheap
and provide a
good
transport.

In conclusion
, I believe that
in spite of
all mentioned above disadvantages she will like this city.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
5.5
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