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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position v.4

A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position v. 4
Academics have different opinion regarding curriculum for school children and this debate has not been settled yet. Some educationist advice to implement the one set of courses for all school children while other believe that autonomy should be given to state boards to devise their primary & secondary education curriculum. I support this autonomy for various reasons which I shall explain in this essay. People who believe in national curriculum have some valid points. Firstly, by implementing the one set of course, every child will get same kind of educational exposure which will reduce the problems cropping up owing to different standards followed by state boards. For example, my sister studied in central board and has wider knowledge in contrast to my younger brother who completed his schooling from state board. Even some of the education institutions prefer students from particular board such and given extra weight-age during admission process. Secondly, considering children having same level of education, higher education course can be planned accordingly. Generally, it is seen that kids from state board when goes to other states, they face lot of issues related to past education and go through tremendous stress which can be removed through this national curriculum up-to some extent. However, there are various advantages of having different education trends in school. First of all, in big countries like India, every state has different culture and state government or bodies set the education contents based on the local culture, history and other factors. It is ensured that students must know about their identity, culture etc. and should be passed to next generation through course curriculum. For instance, India’s national language is Hindi but southern states rarely use Hindi as communication medium and keep national language as an optional language. Moreover, every province has different set of problem to be dealt which can be overlooked if one course agent is implemented nationwide. In the conclusion, school curriculum should be chosen based on the local preference as this process makes sure that local culture and identity is not sidelined. Nevertheless, set of contents can be standardized in order to avoid the large deviation in exposure.
Academics have
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different
opinion regarding
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curriculum
for
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school
children and this debate has not
been settled
yet
.
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Some
educationist advice to implement the one set of
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courses
for all
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school
children while other believe that autonomy should be
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given
to
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state
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boards
to devise their primary
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&amp
; secondary
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education
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curriculum
. I support this autonomy for various reasons which I shall
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explain
in this essay.

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People
who believe in
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national
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curriculum
have
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some
valid points.
Firstly
, by implementing the one set of
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course
, every child will
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get
same kind of educational exposure which will
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reduce
the problems cropping up owing to
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different
standards followed by
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state
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boards
.
For example
, my sister studied in central
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board
and has wider knowledge
in contrast
to my younger brother who completed his schooling from
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state
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board
. Even
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some of the
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education
institutions prefer students from particular
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board
such and
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given
extra weight-age during admission process.
Secondly
, considering children having same level of
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education
, higher
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education
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course
can
be planned
accordingly
.
Generally
, it is
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seen
that kids from
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state
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board
when goes to other
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states
, they face
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lot of
issues related to past
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education
and go through tremendous
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stress
which can
be removed
through this
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national
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curriculum
up-to
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some
extent.

However
, there are various advantages of having
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different
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education
trends in
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school
.
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First of all
, in
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big
countries like India, every
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state
has
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different
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culture
and
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state
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government
or bodies set the
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education
contents based on the local
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culture
, history and other factors. It
is ensured
that students
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must
know about their identity,
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culture
etc. and should
be passed
to
next
generation through
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course
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curriculum
.
For instance
, India’s
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national
language is Hindi
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but
southern
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states
rarely
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use
Hindi as communication medium and
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keep
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national
language as an optional language.
Moreover
, every province has
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different
set of problem to
be dealt
which can
be overlooked
if one
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course
agent
is implemented
nationwide.

In the conclusion,
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school
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curriculum
should
be chosen
based on the local preference as this process
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makes
sure that local
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culture
and identity is not sidelined.
Nevertheless
, set of contents can
be standardized
in order to avoid the large deviation in exposure.
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49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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