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A model answer for the Large Shopping Malls Are Replacing Small Shops v.1

A model answer for the Large Shopping Malls Are Replacing Small Shops v. 1
The importance of shopping malls is always a debatable topic over the years. People around the globe are divided in their opinions. Even though many people claim that it is beneficial and others reject this notion. The subject attracts the majority of views from people and remains a hot topic among people of concern. Obviously my mindset gets with the perspective that a shopping mall is good to change. In this essay, I shall scrutinize my viewpoints by providing some relevant examples and explanations before drawing a plausible conclusion. There are myriad reasons that further explain this argument, but the most preponderant one stems from the fact that the shopping mall gives all the shops in one shelter. To get an authentic reflection, it provides all kinds of variety of shops and customers to get easier to purchase everything. The most impeccable example, I can quote is the survey done at the University of Chicago, which clearly states that 90% of people agreed with this statement. Another key justification for upholding this notion is that large shopping mall having a lot of parking facilities. To be precise, customers having more comfort to park their vehicles easily with minimal or free pay. The most pertinent example that could be provided here is an article published in the Motor Vehicle Department in India, which clearly states that 70% of people utilized this facility. According to the argument aforementioned, one can reach the conclusion that this is a good change like large shopping malls were replaced small shops. It is accepted that people take cognizance of this fact and further the government should establish guidance to educate and aware of people.
The importance of
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shopping
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malls
is always a debatable topic over the years.
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People
around the globe
are divided
in their opinions.
Even though
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many
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people
claim that it is beneficial
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and others
reject this notion. The subject attracts the majority of views from
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people
and remains a hot topic among
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people
of concern.
Obviously
my mindset
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gets
with the perspective that a
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shopping
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mall
is
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good
to
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change
. In this essay, I shall scrutinize my viewpoints by providing
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some
relevant examples and explanations
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before
drawing a plausible conclusion.

There are myriad reasons that
further
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explain
this argument,
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but
the most preponderant one stems from the fact that the
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shopping
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mall
gives all the shops in one shelter. To
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get
an authentic reflection, it provides all kinds of variety of shops and customers to
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get
easier to
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purchase
everything. The most impeccable example, I can quote is the survey done at the University of Chicago, which
clearly
states that 90% of
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people
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agreed
with this statement.

Another key justification for upholding this notion is that large
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shopping
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mall
having
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a lot of
parking facilities. To be precise, customers having more comfort to park their vehicles
easily
with minimal or free pay. The most pertinent example that could
be provided
here is an article published in the Motor Vehicle Department in India, which
clearly
states that 70% of
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people
utilized this facility.

According to the argument aforementioned, one can reach the conclusion that this is a
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good
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change
like large
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shopping
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malls
were replaced
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small
shops. It is
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accepted
that
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people
take cognizance of this fact and
further
the
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government
should establish guidance to educate and aware of
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people
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay A model answer for the Large Shopping Malls Are Replacing Small Shops v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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