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A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. v. 3
The world is continuously enhancing by different ways and infrastructure transformation has a pivotal role in region's beauty. Architectural proficiency has their significant value in the country’s historical importance. Some argue that the spending lump sum of money on repairing old buildings is fatuous approach. Instead of spending on ancient houses conduce in building new one. Thus, I will draw your attention to my conclusion via different ways. To begin with, a bunch of money spending on archaic houses is an ingenious way to attract tourism. I utterly agree with using money on historical buildings. Firstly, undoubtedly, tourism attracts via ancient houses and it will maintain the legacy of the province. In recent times, generally, people want to travel in those cities that have historical worth. For example, recently, UNESCO declared, Ahmedabad is one of the heritage cities. After that incident, a survey by a regional news agency claim that the tourism sector is 60% ascended in the past couple of months because of Ahmedabad’s historical ranges in buildings. Secondly, Houses & ancient sculptures do not restore have to be destroyed. Compare to skyscrapers, archaic homes have a diverse vibe and this building has a huge significance into cultures & tradition. For instance, most of the people in their leisure time, they visit the oldest cities like, Agra, Jaipur and many more to see archaic gallant structures. Hence, reestablish the ancient houses to animate the cities. To conclude, buildings which could be not recuperated, should be demolished. Keep the historical figures in a very secure way and rely on buildings to adorn the city.
The world is
continuously
enhancing by
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different
ways and infrastructure transformation has a pivotal role in region's beauty. Architectural proficiency has their significant value in the country’s
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historical
importance.
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Some
argue that the spending lump sum of money on repairing
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old
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buildings
is fatuous approach.
Instead
of spending on
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ancient
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houses
conduce in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
new one.
Thus
, I will draw your attention to my conclusion via
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different
ways.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, a bunch of money spending on archaic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
is an ingenious way to attract tourism. I
utterly
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agree
with using money on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
.
Firstly
,
undoubtedly
, tourism attracts via
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
and it will maintain the legacy of the province. In recent times,
generally
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
want to travel in those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
that have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
worth.
For example
, recently, UNESCO declared, Ahmedabad is one of the heritage
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cities
. After that incident, a survey by a regional news agency claim that the tourism sector is 60% ascended in the past couple of months
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of Ahmedabad’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
ranges in buildings.

Secondly
,
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Houses
&
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ancient
sculptures do not restore
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have to
be
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destroyed
. Compare to skyscrapers, archaic homes have a diverse vibe and this
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building
has a huge significance into cultures & tradition.
For instance
, most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in their leisure time, they visit the oldest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
like, Agra, Jaipur and
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many
more to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
archaic gallant structures.
Hence
, reestablish the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
to animate the cities.

To conclude
,
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buildings
which could be not recuperated, should
be demolished
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Keep
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
historical
figures in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
secure way and rely on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
to adorn the city.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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