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A growing number of people feel that animals should to be exploited by people and they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research discuss b v.2

A growing number of people feel that animals should to be exploited by people and they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research discuss b v. 2
Nowadays Human interaction with animals is one of the most substantial issues that been raised by animals protection groups and syndicates. Undoubtedly, animals are there to ensure humanity progress and survival. But, unfortunately animals are other creatures that feel much pain as human do. Decades ago, animals were one of the most vital and important means of transportation through centuries, whereas people were used to utilize it in their travels between countries, nations and districts. For example merchants used to travel for displaying and selling their merchandises for foreigners in different places, and therefore that was not possible without exploiting animals for this purpose. Consequently, this kind of utilization cannot be avoided or neglected in such important purpose that demonstrates humanity persistence for existence. Moreover, Humaneness is the most important beings on the plants. It is absolutely necessary for them to ensure sufficient nutrition resources. For instance, the meet which animals produce has an important role on the humanity’s nutrition system. Also, Tents and rugs are made from sheep' s wool or goats' hair. This act of competent uses of animals would be beneficial for the humanity’s survival, sustainability and endurance. In addition to that, being able to conduct researches and experiments on animals, allow Scientists to discover a new cures for various diseases that endangered human’s existence and has stood for the test of time. For example, diabetes medication, fever and many other remedies that been disclosed only after an immense trails on animals. Accordingly, through this way of researches, humanity been able to save a considerable number of people’s souls. Since scientists were able to apply, monitor and conclude their results based on their experiments on animals and understand the body’s reactions, allergies and recovery period and then releasing their results in order to treat unwell people. On the other hand, there are a number of researches and experiments were been conducted on animals for unnecessary outputs. It has been shown on a numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories that a substantial amount of researches was done for cosmetics, not to find a real cures for diseases. In addition to that, animals been kept in cages for long period, suffer and feel pain without any businesslike result. It was proven in many occasion by animals groups and syndicates that these animals feel pain as much human do. We puny human have had the thought that there is not much we can do to protect and nurse the animals. Therefore, authorities and NOG’s need to pay more attention and sufficient guidance to upgrade people’s consciences about the right of treating animals. In conclusion, I believe despite the fact that there are a number of reports and evidences of the mistreatments of animals for unnecessary purposes, people still need to employ and exploit animals for their sustainability, progress and prosperity. In the future I think people and animals groups needs to increase people knowledge about animals rights and impotency for the whole universe
Nowadays
Human
interaction with
animals
is one of the most substantial issues that
been raised
by
animals
protection groups and syndicates.
Undoubtedly
,
animals
are there to ensure
humanity
progress and survival.
But
, unfortunately
animals
are other creatures that feel much pain as
human
do.

Decades ago,
animals
were one of the most vital and
important
means of transportation through centuries, whereas
people
were
used
to utilize it in their travels between countries, nations and districts.
For example
merchants
used
to travel for displaying and selling their merchandises for foreigners in
different
places, and
therefore
that was not possible without exploiting
animals
for this purpose.
Consequently
, this kind of utilization cannot
be avoided
or neglected in such
important
purpose that demonstrates
humanity
persistence for existence.

Moreover
, Humaneness is the most
important
beings on the plants. It is
absolutely
necessary for them to ensure sufficient nutrition resources.
For instance
, the
meet
which
animals
produce has an
important
role on the
humanity’s
nutrition system.
Also
, Tents and rugs
are made
from
sheep&
#039; s wool or
goats&
#039; hair. This act of competent
uses
of
animals
would be beneficial for the
humanity’s
survival, sustainability and endurance.

In addition
to that, being able to conduct
researches
and experiments on
animals
,
allow
Scientists to discover a new
cures
for various diseases that endangered
human’s
existence and has stood for the
test
of time.
For example
, diabetes medication, fever and
many
other remedies that
been disclosed
only
after an immense
trails
on
animals
.
Accordingly
, through this way of
researches
,
humanity
been able to save a considerable number of
people’s
souls. Since scientists were able to apply, monitor and conclude their results based on their experiments on
animals
and understand the body’s reactions, allergies and recovery period and then releasing their results in order to treat unwell
people
.

On the other hand
, there are a number of
researches
and experiments
were been
conducted on
animals
for unnecessary outputs. It has
been shown
on a numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories that a substantial amount of
researches
was done
for cosmetics, not to find a real cures for diseases.

In addition
to that,
animals
been
kept
in cages for long period, suffer and feel pain without any businesslike result. It
was proven
in
many
occasion by
animals
groups and syndicates that these
animals
feel pain as much
human
do. We puny
human
have had the
thought
that there is not much we can do to protect and nurse the
animals
.
Therefore
, authorities and
NOG
’s need to pay more attention and sufficient guidance to upgrade
people’s
consciences about the right of treating animals.

In conclusion
, I believe despite the fact that there are a number of reports and evidences of the
mistreatments
of
animals
for unnecessary purposes,
people
still
need to employ and exploit
animals
for their sustainability, progress and prosperity. In the future I
think
people
and
animals
groups needs to increase
people
knowledge about
animals
rights and impotency for the whole
universe
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44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should to be exploited by people and they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research discuss b v. 2

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