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A growing number of people feel that animals should be not exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as human, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reason from your own experience and examples where relevant v.2

A growing number of people feel that animals should be not exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as human, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research Give reason from your own experience and examples where relevant v. 2
Animals, undoubtedly, are an imperative part of the ecosystem. However, it has become a controversial issue that whether animals should be prevented from involving in experimentation and killed or not. As far as I am concerned, I deem that animals must be preserved, which I will explicate in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, all living beings have an equal right to live and animals also include in this class. Therefore, if any person eats the herbivores or carnivores, it is against the elementary right of living. Additionally, technology, nowadays, has emerged as a power which may have distinctive alternatives to do experiments instead on animals, which can be beneficial to stabilize the number of these creatures. Besides, the religious belief is associated with the view to not eat the animals. To elaborate it, some people who are related to some specific religion deny to feed on animals as it is against their religion. For an instance, Hindu masses refrain from eating cow since it is considered as a god among them. Consequently, research on animals is argued. On the flip side, some individuals assert that animals are a good source of protein and vitamins. Therefore, these are eaten by human beings which is helpful to remain healthy. For example, chicken is prescribed by many doctors to the patients who have fracture as it is fruitful to get strong bones. Along with this, animals have some characteristics identical to humans, which cannot be found in any other living beings. Thus, they are the one on whom the research can be done easily to prepare any medicine. These are the factors why animal experimentation and feeding is supported. In compendium, although it is advocated that there is nothing wrong in doing research work in addition to eating the animals, I am in favour of protecting the animals from experiments and becoming the food of the masses.
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Animals
,
undoubtedly
, are an imperative part of the ecosystem.
However
, it has become a controversial issue that whether
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
from involving in experimentation and killed or not. As far as I
am concerned
, I deem that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be preserved
, which I will explicate in the upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, all living beings have an equal right to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and
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animals
also
include in this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.
Therefore
, if any person eats the herbivores or carnivores, it is against the elementary right of living.
Additionally
, technology, nowadays, has emerged as a power which may have distinctive alternatives to do experiments
instead
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
, which can be beneficial to stabilize the number of these creatures.
Besides
, the religious belief
is associated
with the view to not eat the
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animals
. To elaborate it,
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some
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people
who
are related
to
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some
specific religion deny to feed on
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animals
as it is against their religion. For an instance, Hindu masses refrain from eating cow since it
is considered
as a god among them.
Consequently
, research on
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animals
is argued
.

On the flip side,
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some
individuals assert that
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animals
are a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
source of protein and vitamins.
Therefore
, these
are eaten
by human beings which is helpful to remain healthy.
For example
, chicken
is prescribed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
doctors to the patients who have fracture as it is fruitful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
strong bones. Along with this,
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animals
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
characteristics identical to humans, which cannot
be found
in any other living beings.
Thus
, they are the one on whom the research can
be done
easily
to prepare any medicine. These are the factors why
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animal
experimentation and feeding
is supported
.

In compendium, although it
is advocated
that there is nothing
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wrong
in doing research work
in addition
to eating the
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animals
, I am in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of protecting the
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animals
from experiments and becoming the food of the masses.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should be not exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as human, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research Give reason from your own experience and examples where relevant v. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
316 words
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