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Some people think schools should group pipils according to their academic ability but others believe pupil with different abilities should educated together. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think schools should group pipils according to their academic ability but others believe pupil with different abilities should educated together. v. 1
Although it is sometimes thought that students with different intelligence should be separated in different classes, other people assert that the focus should be on educating in the same level. In my opinion, I consider that learner with different IQ ought to educate together. On the one hand, individuals think that it had better if there are not any isolation for many reasons and I agree. Firstly, mixed ability classes encourage children of all abilities to cooperate which, consequently, it has significant effects on their workplace since they are less likely to tolerate their colleagues delays in the teamwork. Secondly, grouping by abilities may have a negative impact on schoolchild as they do not want to be seen as less intelligent than their peers. As a result of this, they may lose their self-esteem; therefore, they become unwilling to compete with their classmate. On the other hand, it is often believed that it is better if students be diverse based on their intelligence because of some rational thought. First of all, high-level groups may progress faster since their teachers can work at the right speed. Some research findings confirm brilliant students can learn lessons Five times quicker than lower level groups. Therefore, gifted schools provide them with a great opportunity to finish their schools as soon as possible. Furthermore, lower level groups can benefit from a lower space. As a result of it, they encounter less pressure and stress. For instance, a student who is less intelligent are more likely to find it difficult to take part in activities with brilliant students because they though seem foolish in front of them that causes stress. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I think that students should get familiar with different abilities and try to deal with it. Since they will work in the work environment, they should learn how to cooperate with a wide range of intelligence.
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students
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intelligence should
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classes, other
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assert that the focus should be on educating in the same level. In my opinion, I consider that learner with
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different
IQ ought to educate together.

On the one hand, individuals
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think
that it had better if there are not any isolation for
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many
reasons and I
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agree
.
Firstly
, mixed
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ability
classes encourage children of all
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abilities
to cooperate which,
consequently
, it has significant effects on their workplace since they are
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less
likely to tolerate their colleagues delays in the teamwork.
Secondly
, grouping by
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abilities
may have a
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negative
impact on schoolchild as they do not want to be
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seen
as
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less
intelligent than their peers.
As a result
of this, they may lose their self-esteem;
therefore
, they become unwilling to compete with their classmate.

On the other hand
, it is
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often
believed that it is better if
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students
be diverse based on their intelligence
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of
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rational
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, high-level groups may progress faster since their teachers can work at the right speed.
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Some
research findings confirm brilliant
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students
can learn lessons Five times quicker than lower level groups.
Therefore
, gifted schools provide them with a great opportunity to finish their schools as
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soon
as possible.
Furthermore
, lower level groups can benefit from a lower space.
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of it, they encounter
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less
pressure and
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stress
.
For instance
, a
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student
who is
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less
intelligent are more likely to find it difficult to
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take part
in activities with brilliant
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students
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because
they though seem foolish in front of them that causes
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stress
.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary in their opinion, I
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that
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students
should
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get
familiar with
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different
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abilities
and try to deal with it. Since they will work in the work environment, they should learn how to cooperate with a wide range of intelligence.
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IELTS essay Some people think schools should group pipils according to their academic ability but others believe pupil with different abilities should educated together. v. 1

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  American English
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319 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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