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A friend of yours is coming to stay in your house for a week while you are away on holiday. Write a letter to your friend to prepare them for their stay. In your letter: Give your friend information about the location of your house, tell your friend what tasks you would like them to do each day, explain what he/she can do and see in your area v.4

A friend of yours is coming to stay in your house for a week while you are away on holiday. Write a letter to your friend to prepare them for their stay. In your letter: Give your friend information about the location of your house, tell your friend what tasks you would like them to do each day, explain what he/she can do and see in your area v. 4
Dear Paul, How’re you doing? I’m writing you regarding your one-week stay at my apartment, since I won’t be around unfortunately! Getting to my apartment can be quite tricky, so I’d leave these directions here. A train leaves for the Wurzburg city station from Frankfurt International airport every 15 minutes. On getting to the city station, you can either board a public bus or a taxi. I’d prefer, you board a taxi because it is cheaper and more convenient. The taxi would drop you at Hubland street, compound 16. Here, there are five blocks and mine being block A. My apartment is on the 3rd floor, the only one from the left. During your stay, there are two chores I'll really love it if you can help me with. Ordinarily, I wouldn’t want to bother you, but these tasks are necessary. I have a dog whose name is Mama. She’s really friendly and I bet you guys will be best of friends before your stay is over. She eats only in the evenings at 7pm after which she goes on am hour walk which I’d want you to help me with. Also, since I would be out for 2 weeks, kindly help me with the mowing of the grass. The mower can be found in the basement, just behind the door. Whenever you’re bored at home, there is a plethora of places tourists visit in my town. Fortunately, one of them, a magnificent castle, has been on my street, just a five-minute walk down the road. I bet you’d love it. Also, there is a fountain in the city centre and it is usually advisable to visit just before sun dawn, as I hear the view is super beautiful. I really do hope you enjoy your stay. Please call me when you need anything. With love, Ayo
Dear Paul,

How’re you doing? I’m writing you regarding your one-week
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stay
at my apartment, since I won’t be around unfortunately!

Getting to my apartment can be quite tricky,
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so
I’d
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leave
these directions here. A train
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leaves
for the
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Wurzburg
city station from Frankfurt International airport every 15 minutes. On getting to the city station, you can either board a public bus or a taxi. I’d prefer, you board a taxi
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because
it is cheaper and more convenient. The taxi would drop you at
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Hubland
street, compound 16. Here, there are five blocks and mine being block A. My apartment is on the 3rd floor, the
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only
one from the
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left
.

During your
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stay
, there are two chores I'll
really
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love
it if you can
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help
me with.
Ordinarily
, I wouldn’t want to bother you,
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but
these tasks are necessary. I have a dog whose name is
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Mama
. She’s
really
friendly and I bet you guys will be best of friends
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before
your
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stay
is over. She eats
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only
in the evenings at 7pm after which she goes on am hour walk which I’d want you to
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help
me with.
Also
, since I would be out for 2 weeks, kindly
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help
me with the mowing of the grass. The mower can
be found
in the basement,
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just
behind the door.

Whenever you’re bored at home, there is a plethora of places tourists visit in my town.
Fortunately
, one of them, a magnificent castle, has been on my street,
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just
a five-minute walk down the road. I bet you’d
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love
it.
Also
, there is a fountain in the city
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centre
and it is
usually
advisable to visit
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just
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before
sun dawn, as I hear the view is super
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beautiful
.

I
really
do hope you enjoy your
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stay
.
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Please
call me when you need anything.

With
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love
,

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Ayo
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay A friend of yours is coming to stay in your house for a week while you are away on holiday. Write a letter to your friend to prepare them for their stay. In your letter: Give your friend information about the location of your house, tell your friend what tasks you would like them to do each day, explain what he/she can do and see in your area v. 4

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
306 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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