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A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. She is planning to stay with you but you can’t do so. •Tell her the reasons for that•Apologize to her•Make alternative arrangements v.1

A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. She is planning to stay with you but you can’t do so. •Tell her the reasons for that•Apologize to her•Make alternative arrangements v. 1
One of the consequences of globalization is that even though there are more humans on the earth, the number of languages spoken is decreasing. As nomadic people and small tribes assimilated into the wider population, and as powerful languages are increasingly taught in schools, it seems likely that in the future all people will speak the same language. I don’t believe this is a terrible thing, but it's not without its problems. On the surface, it may seem as though the loss of languages is inherently negative. Our language is a part of our cultural identity, and without it people may feel a sense of loss. For example, some populations whose traditional language is dying out will lose their ancient stories and traditions, and feel that they are now no different from other groups of people. This problem is exacerbated by the fact that dominant cultures, whose languages are spreading throughout the world, maintain their cultural traditions. However, although there are clearly some unfortunate side effects of this aspect of globalization, there are so many benefits that they outweigh the negatives. For one thing, the dominance of major languages like English ensures an increased level of literacy throughout populations where previously there were only oral languages or very limited written materials. While the loss of cultural artefacts is regrettable, the rise of literacy increases standards of living, and this is more important. In conclusion, there are some undeniably negative consequences of a global language; however, the increase in literacy levels is an example of a benefit to humanity that vastly outweighs any imaginable drawback.
One of the consequences of globalization is that
even though
there are more humans on the earth, the number of
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languages
spoken is decreasing. As nomadic
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people
and
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small
tribes assimilated into the wider population, and as powerful
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languages
are
increasingly
taught in schools, it seems likely that in the future all
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people
will speak the same
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language
. I don’t believe this is a terrible thing,
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but
it's not without its problems.

On the surface, it may seem as though the loss of
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languages
is
inherently
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negative
. Our
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language
is a part of our cultural identity, and without it
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people
may feel a sense of loss.
For example
,
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some
populations whose traditional
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language
is dying out will lose their ancient stories and traditions, and feel that they are
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now
no
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different
from other groups of
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people
. This problem
is exacerbated
by the fact that dominant cultures, whose
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languages
are spreading throughout the world, maintain their cultural traditions.

However
, although there are
clearly
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some
unfortunate side effects of this aspect of globalization, there are
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so
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many
benefits that they outweigh the negatives. For one thing, the dominance of major
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languages
like English ensures an increased level of literacy throughout populations where previously there were
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only
oral
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languages
or
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very
limited written materials. While the loss of cultural
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artefacts
is regrettable, the rise of literacy increases standards of living, and this is more
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important
.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
undeniably
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negative
consequences of a global
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language
;
however
, the increase in literacy levels is an example of a benefit to humanity that
vastly
outweighs any imaginable drawback.
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IELTS essay A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. She is planning to stay with you but you can’t do so. •Tell her the reasons for that•Apologize to her•Make alternative arrangements v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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