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There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently Write a letter to the management of the public transport company In your letter describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting the public suggest some changes t v.1

There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently Write a letter to the management of the public transport company In your letter describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting the public suggest some changes t v. 1
In these days, mothers and fathers force their children to achieve more in their life. In my opinion, this affect to kids negatively. However, it has some advantages like earning more prizes at the early age. In this essay Firstly, on the positive side, children learn how hard is success and what does winning mean, because of the pressure. Thus, they work harder than their peers to achieve it. Furthermore, they become more successful among their peers. For instance, kids with ambitious parents are more likely to work because of their fear about their families. Hence, this makes them more successful. However, it has some hazardous effects. Some people think that putting pressure on youths affects them badly. To illustrate, if we compare two children, we will clearly see that the child with calm ancestors are less successful but their ideas are more creative and efficient. Thanks to their relax parents, they find much more time to think and create different things. In my opinion, self-improvement is extremely important. For me, the most crucial thing is self-improvement, such as playing piano, reading books, building body. Because these improvements and skills will always be with you, but academical studies just help you to graduate from better university. Moreover, forcing children might disrupt their psychology. To sum up, ancestors play an important role on their sons and daughters. Adults have to change their habits and behaviours to lead their children for a better future. I recommend that adults has to be calm and they shouldn't force their children to success.
In these days, mothers and fathers force their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to achieve more in their life. In my opinion, this affect to kids
negatively
.
However
, it has
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some
advantages like earning more prizes at the early age. In this
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essay


Firstly
, on the
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positive
side,
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children
learn how
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hard
is success and what does winning mean,
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because
of the pressure.
Thus
, they work harder than their peers to achieve it.
Furthermore
, they become more successful among their peers.
For instance
, kids with ambitious parents are more likely to work
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because
of their fear about their families.
Hence
, this
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makes
them more successful.
However
, it has
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some
hazardous effects.

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Some
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people
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think
that putting pressure on youths affects them
badly
. To illustrate, if we compare two
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children
, we will
clearly
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see
that the child with calm ancestors are less successful
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but
their
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ideas
are more creative and efficient. Thanks to their relax parents, they find much more time to
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think
and create
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different
things. In my opinion, self-improvement is
extremely
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important
. For me, the most crucial thing is self-improvement, such as playing piano, reading books, building body.
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Because
these improvements and
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skills
will always be with you,
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but
academical studies
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just
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help
you to graduate from better university.
Moreover
, forcing
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children
might disrupt their psychology.

To sum up, ancestors play an
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important
role on their sons and daughters. Adults
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have to
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change
their habits and
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behaviours
to lead their
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children
for a better future. I recommend that adults
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has to
be
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calm and
they shouldn't force their
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children
to success.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently Write a letter to the management of the public transport company In your letter describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting the public suggest some changes t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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