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a/d universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. v.1

a/d universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. v. 1
Although technology has developed a lot and its achievements in the field of transportation cannot be denied, still numerous people think that bicycles are the most convenient means of reaching to the desired place. Despite being eco-friendly and cheapest means of travel, these cannot be used to commute to far off places due to the consumption of many hours. There are other better methods available varying from cars to buses and many more. To begin with, it is undeniable that cycles are cost saving and less polluting vehicles. Since these do not require any fuel, therefore an individual need not to spend money on different fossil fuels, such as petrol. Apart from the fact, no consumption of liquid petroleum means negligible emission of harmful gases in the atmosphere. Thus it further prevents the environment from contamination of toxic pollutants. For instance, a recent research conducted by the "Go Green" foundation depicts that the use of two wheelers for household purposes helps in improving the quality of air by about 25%. Hence, it has become the need of the hour to promote these pollution free vehicles. However, it is not advantageous to use bicycles to travel to distant destinations. The reason behind that it consumes a lot of time, and hence it becomes necessary to look for other alternative means. Since it is not wise to waste several hours by using such mode of transportation, as, nowadays, people have become workaholics, so private and public transport automobiles are other better and convenient ones. For example, if a person wants to go, from Chandigarh to Delhi, then trains, cars and buses are some quickest way to arrive earlier. In short, longer distances can be covered more quickly by other amenities. To conclude, it is irrefutable that technology has equipped us with plenty of safe methods to migrate from one place to another. Bikes are indeed environment friendly and less expensive, however, these are time consuming as well and one can opt for some different transporting vehicle in spite of giving preference to their use.
Although technology has developed a lot and its achievements in the field of transportation cannot
be denied
,
still
numerous
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people
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think
that bicycles are the most convenient
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means
of reaching to the desired place. Despite being eco-friendly and cheapest
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means
of travel, these cannot be
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used
to commute to far off places due to the consumption of
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many
hours. There are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
better methods available varying from cars to buses and
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many
more.

To
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begin
with, it is undeniable that cycles
are cost
saving and less polluting vehicles. Since these do not require any fuel,
therefore
an individual need not
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to spend
money on
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different
fossil fuels, such as petrol. Apart from the fact, no consumption of liquid petroleum
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means
negligible emission of harmful gases in the atmosphere.
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Thus
it
further
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prevents
the environment from contamination of toxic pollutants.
For instance
, a recent research conducted by the
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"
Go Green
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"
foundation depicts that the
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use
of
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two wheelers
for household purposes
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helps
in improving the quality of air by about 25%.
Hence
, it has become the need of the hour to promote
Did you mean "this pollution" or "these pollutions"?
these pollution
free vehicles.

However
, it is not advantageous to
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use
bicycles to travel to distant destinations. The reason behind that it consumes
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a lot of
time, and
hence
it becomes necessary to look for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
alternative
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means
. Since it is not wise to waste several hours by using such mode of transportation, as, nowadays,
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people
have become workaholics,
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so
private and public transport automobiles are
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other
better and convenient ones.
For example
, if a person wants to go, from Chandigarh to Delhi, then trains, cars and buses are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quickest way to arrive earlier. In short, longer distances can
be covered
more
quickly
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
amenities.

To conclude
, it is irrefutable that technology has equipped us with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of safe methods to migrate from one place to another. Bikes are
indeed
environment friendly and less expensive,
however
, these are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
time consuming
as well
and one can opt for
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some
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different
transporting vehicle
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in spite of
giving preference to their
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use
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay a/d universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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