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In some countries more and more shops are open long hours every day. What are some positive and negative developments of this situation? v.1

In some countries more and more shops are open long hours every day. What are some positive and negative developments of this situation? v. 1
Nowadays, we live in a capitalist economic system where consumerism encourages the acquisition of goods and services in ever-increasing amount, and to fulfil this demand in the global market trade, more and more commercial activities have to work for long hours daily. This essay will highlight both positive and negative developments bet results from such circumstances. To begin with the positives, a significant advantage is that costumers can buy goods whenever do you watch the need. For example, 24/7 stores offer a service during all the hours of the day every day of the week. This makes life easier for a lot of people who do not have time to shop during working hours. Even going you need something in the middle of the night these shops come to your rescue. Not only this, back shaving long hour open stores means there are needed more people to take all shifts which are positive for the unemployment rate. However, this phenomenon emboldens people to consume with a progressively increasing trend, in bed the environment meaning negative ways. Being open for long hours these objects need big electricity conception, which in high rates create problems with global warming. Moreover, having the possibility to purchase more goods increase the amount of waste that we produce with a result to pollute the ecosystem we live in. In conclusion, although these shops are lifesavers for a myriad of people, it is important to consider that they come with plenty of environmental problems, such as global warming and pollution.
Nowadays, we
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live
in a capitalist economic system where consumerism encourages the acquisition of
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goods
and services in ever-increasing amount, and to fulfil this demand in the global market trade, more and more commercial activities
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have to
work for long
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hours
daily. This essay will highlight both
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positive
and
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negative
developments bet results from such circumstances.

To
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begin
with the positives, a significant advantage is that costumers can
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buy
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goods
whenever do you
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watch
the need.
For example
, 24/7 stores offer a service during all the
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hours
of the day every day of the week. This
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makes
life easier for
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a lot of
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people
who do not have time to shop during working
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hours
. Even going you need something in the middle of the night these shops
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come
to your rescue. Not
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only
this, back shaving long
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hour
open stores means there
are needed
more
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people
to take all shifts which are
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positive
for the unemployment rate.

However
, this phenomenon emboldens
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people
to consume with a
progressively
increasing trend, in bed the environment meaning
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negative
ways. Being open for long
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hours
these objects need
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big
electricity conception, which in high rates create problems with global warming.
Moreover
, having the possibility to
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purchase
more
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goods
increase the amount of waste that we produce with a result to pollute the ecosystem we
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live
in.

In conclusion
, although these shops are lifesavers for a myriad of
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people
, it is
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important
to consider that they
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come
with
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plenty
of environmental problems, such as global warming and pollution.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries more and more shops are open long hours every day. What are some positive and negative developments of this situation? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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