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A/D: It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v.1

A/D: It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1
It is believed that heinous crimes are best prevented by taking violent steps, and giving capital punishments are one way of doing this. There are some benefits and drawbacks of such punishments which we will discuss here. On the one hand, those who support death sentences point to the need for the society to learn from others. Consequently, setting examples for other people might prohibit them from committing serious crimes. For instance, in countries such as Saudi Arabia, potential offenders involved in killings, sexual or drug abuse are left with the only option of death sentence, which reflects that local authorities have to deal with such issues less often, as people are afraid of committing such crimes. While in contrast, if such laws are not being practiced, then there would be much difficult for the law enforcement authorities to capture such criminals. On the other hand, death penalties might create a devastating effect among common people. This means that no chances of rehabilitation given to the offenders. This might lead to severe problems, as if one is convicted of such crimes or committed such crime, he/she might proceed further before being captured, because he/she would be aware of the fact that no mercy would be given without any chances of appeals. Countries where death penalty is still practiced, often followed by short trials leading to the death penalty, and one might not be able to defend in this short period. In addition to adults, there is a negative impact on children watching such public executions, and may disturb them mentally in their early developmental age. In conclusion, although the death penalty is being practiced for hundreds of years, it seems that this trend is necessary to protect innocent people from serious offenders because there seem to have no chances of changing their mindset.
It
is believed
that heinous
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crimes
are best
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prevented
by taking violent steps, and giving capital punishments are one way of doing this. There are
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some
benefits and drawbacks of such punishments which we will discuss here.

On the one hand, those who support death sentences point to the need for the society to learn from others.
Consequently
, setting examples for other
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people
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might
prohibit them from committing serious
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crimes
.
For instance
, in countries such as Saudi Arabia, potential offenders involved in killings, sexual or drug abuse are
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left
with the
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only
option of death sentence, which reflects that local authorities
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have to
deal with such issues less
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often
, as
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people
are afraid of committing such
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crimes
. While
in contrast
, if such laws are not
being practiced
, then there would be much difficult for the law enforcement authorities to capture such criminals.

On the other hand
, death
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penalties
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might
create a devastating effect among common
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people
. This means that no chances of rehabilitation
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given
to the offenders. This
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might
lead to severe problems, as if one
is convicted
of such
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crimes
or committed such
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crime
, he/she
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might
proceed
further
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before
being captured
,
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because
he/she would be aware of the fact that no mercy would be
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given
without any chances of appeals. Countries where death
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penalty
is
still
practiced,
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often
followed by short trials leading to the death
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penalty
, and one
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might
not be able to defend in this short period.
In addition
to adults, there is a
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negative
impact on children watching such public executions, and may disturb them mentally in their early developmental age.

In conclusion
, although the death
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penalty
is
being practiced
for hundreds of years, it seems that this trend is necessary to protect innocent
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people
from serious offenders
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because
there seem to have no chances of changing their mindset.
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IELTS essay A/D: It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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