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a/d at universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v.2

a/d at universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v. 2
Human is a social animal. Human require different kinds of stimulus or exposures for their developments in social, emotional, personal, professional and many more aspects. Classes and libraries are inefficient for whole and sole development of human. So, I firmly do agree with the statement that " Universities and colleges should support sports and social activities along with classes and libraries. Firstly, there is something known as practical life experiences, which do not come by reading books or attending classes. There are many dogmas of life like determination, dedication, planning, problem solving, leadership, sportsman ship, group work, team work and many more. It is very difficult to cultivate these principles of life without getting exposure to real world. Sports and social activities provide a good platform to enhance such characteristics. Furthermore, sports and social activities are best way to communicate and to socialize. Science has proven that children, who enjoy sports and social functions, are more intelligent and good communicator than who do not participate in such activities. They have fantastic convincing power and can influence people easily. They are having more dynamic personality. Moreover, fitness is the most important part of life. Sports and many social activities demand a lot heavy body work. For instance, In Gujarati culture, India, there is a social festival known as " Navratri" . This festival is celebrated by playing a folk dance with folk music for three to four hours for nine days. This folk dance needs good endurance power of body, strength of muscles, flexibility of joints. It is one of the best agility exercises. So, people enjoy the festival as well as maintain the fitness. This benefit is not there in going libraries and classes. In nutshell, classes and libraries help to gain knowledge and degree but sports and social activities are the only means by which persons can learn the moral values of life.
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animal. Human require
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different
kinds of stimulus or exposures for their developments in
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social
, emotional, personal, professional and
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many
more aspects.
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Classes
and libraries are inefficient for whole and sole development of human.
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firmly
do
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agree
with the statement that
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; Universities and colleges should support
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sports
and
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social
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activities
along with
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classes
and libraries.

Firstly
, there is something known as practical
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life
experiences, which do not
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come
by reading books or attending
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classes
. There are
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many
dogmas of
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life
like determination, dedication, planning, problem solving, leadership, sportsman ship, group work, team work and
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many
more. It is
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difficult to cultivate these principles of
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life
without getting exposure to real world.
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and
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social
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activities
provide a
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good
platform to enhance such characteristics.

Furthermore
,
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and
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activities
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way to communicate and to socialize. Science has proven that children, who enjoy
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and
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functions, are more intelligent and
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good
communicator than
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do not participate in such
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. They have fantastic convincing power and can influence
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people
easily
. They are having more dynamic personality.

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, fitness is the most
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part of
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life
.
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and
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many
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demand a lot heavy body work.
For instance
, In Gujarati culture, India, there is a
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festival known as
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;
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is celebrated
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endurance power of body, strength of muscles, flexibility of joints. It is one of the best agility exercises.
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,
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enjoy the festival
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as maintain the fitness. This benefit is not there in going libraries and classes.

In nutshell,
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classes
and libraries
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help
to gain knowledge and degree
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but
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sports
and
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social
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activities
are the
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only
means by which persons can learn the moral values of
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life
.
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IELTS essay a/d at universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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