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A company has announced that it wish to build a large factory near your community. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. do you support or oppose the factory. explain your position. v.1

A company has announced that it wish to build a large factory near your community. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. do you support or oppose the factory. explain your position. v. 1
The growth of every community is depending on the self-development of community. In my opinion the industrialization is one of the major factors in development of community. When any industry or company establish near any community, the community has several good and bad effect on the people' s of community. In following essay, I will explain few main advantages and disadvantages of company establish near my community. Starting with advantages of company build near community. Any company need employee for its superior working. When company build near the community, company has got more employees with less pay scale and the community’s people get employment. When people got money they always try to improve their living life style and the effect of that community start developing. The company offer large amount of employment. The large-scale industry is depending on many small-scale industries. Hence it is better opportunity to development of more small-scale businesses which are depend on the large factory. There are also build hotels for residential purpose of company gust. On the other hand the establishment of company near the community has some disadvantages. Any manufacturing industry has some of their by-product which are harmful for the people. The chemical company has there by-product is liquid chemicals, these by-product is not manage well and directly send to the river or dam is much harmful to human as well as other animals. It is also cause of cancer and the death of any animal. The second and most important is company also cause of air pollution. Manufacturing industry produce many poisonous gases, when these gases is directly pass in environment without filtering then it do many health problem to human. It is cause of lungs problem to human as well as breathing problem is also happened due to air pollution. In my opinion the factory build near community is always grateful. Because the advantages of establishing company near the community is much greater than disadvantages. The company also neglect these disadvantages with their well plane and good management. The building of large factory is providing large employment also it improves life style of people' s. Also it cause of development of new small-scale industries.
The growth of every
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is depending
on the self-development of
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community
. In my opinion the industrialization is one of the major factors in development of
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community
. When any
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industry
or
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company
establish
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near
any
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community
, the
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community
has several
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good
and
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bad
effect on the
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people&
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community
. In following essay, I will
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explain
few main advantages and disadvantages of
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company
establish
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near
my community.

Starting with advantages of
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company
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build
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near
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community
. Any
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company
need employee for its superior working. When
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company
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build
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near
the
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community
,
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company
has
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got
more employees with less pay scale and the
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community’s
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people
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get
employment. When
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people
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got
money they always try to
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improve
their living life style and the effect of that
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community
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start
developing. The
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company
offer
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large
amount of employment. The large-scale
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industry
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is depending
on
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many
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small
-scale
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industries
.
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Hence
it is better opportunity to development of more
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small
-scale businesses which are
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depend
on the
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large
factory. There are
also
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build
hotels for residential purpose of
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company
gust.

On the other hand
the establishment of
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company
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near
the
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community
has
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some
disadvantages. Any manufacturing
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industry
has
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some
of their by-product which are harmful for the
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people
. The chemical
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company
has there by-product is liquid chemicals,
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these by-product
is not manage
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well
and
directly
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send
to the river or dam is much harmful to human as
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well
as other animals. It is
also
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cause
of cancer and the death of any animal. The second and most
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important
is
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company
also
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cause
of air pollution. Manufacturing
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industry
produce
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poisonous gases, when these gases
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is
directly
pass in environment without filtering then it
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do
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many health
problem to human. It is
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of lungs problem to human as
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well
as breathing problem is
also
happened due to air pollution.

In my opinion the factory
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build
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near
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community
is always grateful.
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Because
the advantages of establishing
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company
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near
the
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community
is much greater than disadvantages. The
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company
also
neglect these disadvantages with their
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well
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plane
and
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good
management. The building of
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large
factory is providing
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large
employment
also
it
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improves
life style of
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it
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cause
of development of new
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small
-scale
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industries
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60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay A company has announced that it wish to build a large factory near your community. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. do you support or oppose the factory. explain your position. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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