A 4-week holiday a year can make employees do better at their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1
A 4-week holiday a year can make employees do better at their jobs. v. 1
In this day and age, citizens in towns have a propensity to live alone or in a nuclear family instead of in an extended family. From my perspective, I believe it brings many advantages.
First of all, living alone will force youngsters, particularly men, to learn do housework including washing clothes or cleaning their rooms. It helps them to cultivate their independence. Secondly, should youths live alone, they will have private spaces without disturbing to others like their parents or their siblings. Therefore, they can put emphasis on either their work or study. For example, I live alone in Hanoi, I often wake up at 4AM to exercise and cooking for breakfast after that. I made a noise which effect on my parents when I lived with them four years ago.
Thirdly, when people live in a nuclear family, they can build up their offspring better. In a view of the fact that they do not need to take care of elderly people; furthermore, in this way, they can save an amount of money and have time to relax after work. For example, when senior people get sick their offspring have to take care of them and do some work including helping them to eat. Finally, it is undeniable that there is little controversy between members of a family. If people live in an extended family, for instance, it can cause controversy, between daughter-in-law and mother-in-law, which often occur in almost all extended families. The process continues with it being produced by hands
In conclusion, owing the aforementioned ideas, I consider that it exerts positive impacts on people, should they live alone or in a nuclear family.
In this day and age, citizens in towns have a propensity to
live
alone
or in a nuclear
family
instead
of in an extended
family
. From my perspective, I believe it brings
many
advantages.
First of all
, living
alone
will force youngsters,
particularly
men
, to learn
do
housework including washing clothes or cleaning their rooms. It
helps
them to cultivate their independence.
Secondly
, should youths
live
alone
, they will have private spaces without disturbing to others like their parents or their siblings.
Therefore
, they can put emphasis on either their work or study.
For example
, I
live
alone
in Hanoi, I
often
wake up at 4AM to exercise and cooking for breakfast after that. I made a noise which effect on my parents when I
lived
with them four years ago.
Thirdly
, when
people
live
in a nuclear
family
, they can build up their offspring better. In a view of the fact that they do not need to take care of elderly
people
;
furthermore
, in this way, they can save an amount of money and have time to relax after work.
For example
, when senior
people
get
sick their offspring
have to
take care of them and do
some
work including helping them to eat.
Finally
, it is undeniable that there is
little
controversy between members of a
family
. If
people
live
in an extended
family
,
for instance
, it can cause controversy, between daughter-in-law and mother-in-law, which
often
occur in almost all extended
families
. The process continues with it
being produced
by
hands
In conclusion
, owing the aforementioned
ideas
, I consider that it exerts
positive
impacts on
people
, should they
live
alone
or in a nuclear
family
.
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