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82. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.2

82. Technology has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects about technology, and how it has made the world a better place to live. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely agree with the idea that it has made world a better place. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs. First and foremost, it has made life easier. Starts from medicine, and ends from army. Today’s life is much easier than it was approximately twenty years ago. Life is such a piece of cake today, but with those good conditions, the number of coach potatoes has increased and partially it is bad for our society. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my parents bought a smart house, which is the most famous invention of las decade. In the beginning I thought that it is kind of toy and it seemed me ludicrous. But after first time that I used it, I felt that it will become one of my lovely devices. It is very simple in use, for instance when I am in the road of home, with the device in my hand I switch on the electrical kettle, and it is boiling before my coming. As a result I have a hot tea just before I am at home. For this reason I think that technology is the most important machine which spins world. Secondly, technology gives you a chance to connect with the person you want. Twenty years ago, people communicate through countries by public telephones, which were expensive. But now there are many applications which help you to contact with a person among continents. Drawing from my own experience when we bought a first personal computer, I downloaded the Skype, which helps to take video calls for free. Since then we can communicate when we want with my uncle who is in the Netherlands. Moreover we can send photos and mediafiles. It is certainly clear to see how the technologies have made the world a better place to live. To make a long story short, in light of above mentioned reasons I strongly believe that today’s world is better place to live, and this is because of technology which solved many hard questions.
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and
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aspects about
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technology
, and how it has made the
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world
a
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better
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to
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agree
with the
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idea
that it has made
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world
a
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place
. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and I will develop these
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ideas
in the subsequent paragraphs.

First
and foremost, it has made life easier.
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Starts
from medicine, and ends from army.
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Today
’s life is much easier than it was approximately twenty years ago. Life is such a piece of cake
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today
,
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but
with those
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conditions, the number of coach potatoes has increased and
partially
it is
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bad
for our society. I
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have to
admit that my opinion on this matter has been
profoundly
influenced by my
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own
personal experience. You
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see
, my parents
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bought
a smart
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house
, which is the most
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famous
invention of
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decade. In the beginning I
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thought
that it is kind of toy and it seemed me ludicrous.
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But
after
first
time that I
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used
it, I felt that it will become one of my lovely devices. It is
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very
simple in
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use
,
for instance
when I am in the road of home, with the device in my hand I switch on the electrical kettle, and it is boiling
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before
my coming.
As a result
I have a hot tea
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just
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before
I am at home.
For this reason
I
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think
that
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technology
is the most
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important
machine which spins world.

Secondly
,
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technology
gives you a chance to connect with the person you want. Twenty years ago,
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people
communicate through countries by public telephones, which were expensive.
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But
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now
there are
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many
applications which
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help
you to contact with a person among continents. Drawing from my
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own
experience when we
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bought
a
first
personal computer, I downloaded the Skype, which
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helps
to take video calls for free. Since
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then we
can communicate when we want with my uncle who is in the Netherlands.
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Moreover
we can
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send
photos and
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mediafiles
. It is
certainly
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to
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how the
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technologies
have made the
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world
a
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better
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to
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.

To
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a long story short, in light of above mentioned reasons I
strongly
believe that
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today
’s
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is
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to
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, and this is
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of
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which solved
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hard
questions.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay 82. Technology has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
398 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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