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792describe a useful websiteyou should saywhat it ishow often you visit itwhat kind of site it iswhat kind of information it offersand explain why you think it is useful v.1

792describe a useful websiteyou should saywhat it ishow often you visit itwhat kind of site it iswhat kind of information it offersand explain why you think it is useful v. 1
Over the years, humans have taken to travelling to different places of interest as a form of relaxation. Owing to the drastic reduction in the cost of air travel, numerous nations have now opened their arms to more visitors. In my opinion, I believe that the benefits of tourism such as income creation outweigh any disadvantage it might pose. Admittedly, there are some drawbacks to international travel. Firstly, there is a high rate of the disease being spread by international travellers. This is more prominent among visitors from epidemic countries. For example, HIV has now become a disease that has now become a worldwide epidemic. Also, there is a high rate of theft as a result of tourism. Tourists carrying visible items such as cameras, jewellery, smartphones and cash are usually at risk because the indigenes believe that these people are rich Nevertheless, despite the disadvantages, the major benefit of tourism is income generation. Large hotels and resorts employ local people. Also, small businesses such as small shops and cafes sell locally manufactured products such as souvenirs. In this way, the tourist industry will play a major role in income generation to locals and this will consequently improve the economy of the nation. Another way tourism has helped a country is that it has increased awareness and understanding of a country. When tourists visit a place, the learn about the various cultures, historical facts and way of life of this place and they can go back to their own country and share this knowledge with their friends and families. In conclusion, while tourism is detrimental because of its health and safety issues, its benefits outweigh any demerits it might possess.
Over the years, humans have taken to travelling to
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different
places of interest as a form of relaxation. Owing to the drastic reduction in the cost of air travel, numerous nations have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
opened their arms to more visitors. In my opinion, I believe that the benefits of
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tourism
such as income creation outweigh any disadvantage it might pose.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
drawbacks to international travel.
Firstly
, there is a high rate of the disease
being spread
by international
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travellers
. This is more prominent among visitors from epidemic
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countries
.
For example
, HIV has
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now
become a disease that has
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now
become a worldwide epidemic.
Also
, there is a high rate of theft
as a result
of
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tourism
. Tourists carrying visible items such as cameras,
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jewellery
, smartphones and cash are
usually
at
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risk
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because
the
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indigenes
believe that these
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people
are
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rich


Nevertheless
, despite the disadvantages, the major benefit of
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tourism
is income generation.

Large hotels and resorts employ local
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people
.
Also
,
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small
businesses such as
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small
shops and
'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"
cafes
sell
locally
manufactured products such as souvenirs. In this way, the tourist industry will play a major role in income generation to locals and this will
consequently
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improve
the economy of the nation. Another way
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tourism
has
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helped
a
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country
is that it has increased awareness and understanding of a
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country
. When tourists visit a place,
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'learn' is correct. If 'learn' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the learn
about the various cultures, historical facts and way of life of this
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place and
they can go back to their
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own
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country
and share this knowledge with their friends and families.

In conclusion
, while
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tourism
is detrimental
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because
of its health and safety issues, its benefits outweigh any demerits it might possess.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 792describe a useful websiteyou should saywhat it ishow often you visit itwhat kind of site it iswhat kind of information it offersand explain why you think it is useful v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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