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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter•advise them of your situation•explain how this is affecting you•request a new card v.1

You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter•advise them of your situation•explain how this is affecting you•request a new card v. 1
Issues related to animal experimentation are frequently discussed these days, particularly in the media. It is often said that animals should not be used in testing because it is cruel and unnecessary. This essay will examine the arguments for and against animal testing. On the one hand, the people who support these experiments say that we must do tests on animals. For instance, many famous lifesaving drugs were invented in this way, and animal experiments may help us to find more cures in the future. Indeed, possibly even a cure for cancer and AIDS. Furthermore, the animals which are used are not usually wild but are bred especially for experiments. Therefore, they believe it is not true that animal experiments are responsible for reducing the number of wild animals on the planet. On the other hand, others feel that there are good arguments against this. First and foremost, animal experiments are unkind and cause animals a lot of pain. In addition, they feel that many tests are not really important, and in fact animals are not only used to test new medicines but also new cosmetics, which could be tested on humans instead. Another issue is that sometimes an experiment on animals gives us the wrong result because animals’ bodies are not exactly the same as our own. As a consequence, this testing may not be providing the safety that its proponents claim. In conclusion, I am of the opinion, on balance, that the benefits do not outweigh the disadvantages, and testing on animals should not continue. Although it may improve the lives of humans, it is not fair that animals should suffer in order to achieve this.
Issues related to
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animal
experimentation are
frequently
discussed these days,
particularly
in the media. It is
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often
said that
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animals
should not be
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used
in testing
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because
it is cruel and unnecessary. This essay will examine the arguments for and against
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animal
testing.

On the one hand, the
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people
who support these
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experiments
say that we
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must
do
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tests
on
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animals
.
For instance
,
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many
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famous
lifesaving drugs
were invented
in this way, and
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animal
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experiments
may
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help us to find
more cures in the future.
Indeed
,
possibly
even a cure for cancer and AIDS.
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, the
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animals
which are
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used
are not
usually
wild
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are bred
especially
for
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experiments
.
Therefore
, they believe it is not true that
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animal
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experiments
are responsible for reducing the number of wild
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animals
on the planet.

On the other hand
, others feel that there are
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good
arguments against this.
First
and foremost,
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animal
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experiments
are unkind and cause
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animals
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a lot of
pain.
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, they feel that
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many
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tests
are not
really
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important
, and in fact
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animals
are not
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only
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used
to
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test
new medicines
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but
also
new cosmetics, which could be
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tested
on humans
instead
. Another issue is that
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sometimes
an
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experiment
on
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animals
gives us the
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wrong
result
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because
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animals’
bodies are not exactly the same as our
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own
. As a consequence, this testing may not be providing the safety that its proponents claim.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion, on balance, that the benefits do not outweigh the disadvantages, and testing on
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animals
should not continue. Although it may
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improve
the
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lives
of humans, it is not
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fair
that
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animals
should suffer in order to achieve this.
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IELTS essay You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter•advise them of your situation•explain how this is affecting you•request a new card v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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