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2071 Describe a seaside place you like to visitYou should sayWhere it isWhat you like about itWhat you do thereWho you go there withAnd explain why you like to visit it v.1

2071 Describe a seaside place you like to visitYou should sayWhere it isWhat you like about itWhat you do thereWho you go there withAnd explain why you like to visit it v. 1
In recent years, there has been a growing trend that people tend to buy things on the Internet. Its present both pros and cos, After all, in my opinion, its benefits are much more significant than the drawbacks. E-commerce has dramatically changed the way people do business and buy products and services. With billions of Internet users, online shopping is no longer a theory, rather it has changed people’s lifestyle and buying habits to a greater extent. With the exception of few disadvantages, online shopping has tremendous benefits and it will dominate the global trade even more in the coming days to make people’s life easier. To start with, online shopping enables consumers to get a service or a product from home. They no longer need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue to pay their bills or withdraw cash. With the widespread usage of the handheld smart devices and the Internet, shopping is just a few finger taps away. This saves valuable time and enables people to use plastic money, which is more secure than conventional transactions. In addition, online banking, ticket booking system, e-payment and online-subscriptions facilitate mass people to avoid traffic congestion and help maintain a green environment. From a field owner’s perspective, online shopping permits them to run the business 24x7 and without the need for any extra staff, utility bills and so on. It permits them to offer products at a more competitive price. As well, consumers enjoy a greater freedom to purchase global products from renowned websites like eBay and Amazon and compare the quality and price of a product before making a purchasing decision. Perhaps the most noticeable benefit of this trend is the unparalleled opportunity it has brought for ordinary people to open their own online shops and run small businesses online. It would never have happened without the boom of online business trends. On the other hand, shopping online brings consumers some disadvantages. Initially, since people are unable to touch or to see the products they want to buy in reality, it is always hard for them to examine the quality of these products. As a result, they might purchase the items with poor quality. In addition to that, as consumers do not feel happy with the items they had bought online, they tend to abandon these products or don't use them at all. This is definitely a waste of money. Moreover, the buyings thing on the Internet often makes people confused since there is a great number of shops on the Internet. To be specific, buyers might see the same products in several shops, but the prices for these items can be very different, ranging from reasonable to prohibitively expensive price. Consequently, they will not know which products they should purchase. Among the drawbacks of online shopping, identity theft and digital scams are more common. Careless use of a credit card or sensitive personal information can often invite intruders and hackers to harm someone. Finally, online shopping does not allow someone to physically inspect a product before buying it and this often leads to customer dissatisfaction. However, these demerits can easily be avoided by being cautious and relying on reputed brands. In conclusion, although buying things on the Internet exerts some adverse aspects, the advantages can justify these. The overwhelming benefits online shopping offers far outweigh the few demerits it has. I personally am an online shopper and I believe that this has immensely improved our freedom of shopping and lifestyle.
In recent years, there has been a growing trend that
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people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
things on the Internet. Its present both pros and cos,
After all
, in my opinion, its
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benefits
are much more significant than the drawbacks. E-commerce has
dramatically
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changed
the way
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people
do
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business
and
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buy
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products
and services. With billions of Internet users,
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online
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shopping
is no longer a theory,
rather
it has
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changed
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people’s
lifestyle and
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buying
habits to a greater extent.
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With the exception of
few disadvantages,
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online
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shopping
has tremendous
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benefits
and it will dominate the global trade even more in the coming days to
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make
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people’s
life easier.

To
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start
with,
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online
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shopping
enables
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consumers
to
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get
a service or a
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product
from home. They no longer need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue to pay their bills or withdraw cash. With the widespread usage of the handheld smart devices and the Internet,
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shopping
is
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just
a few finger taps away. This saves valuable time and enables
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people
to
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use
plastic money, which is more secure than conventional transactions.
In addition
,
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online
banking, ticket booking system, e-payment and online-subscriptions facilitate mass
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people
to avoid traffic congestion and
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help
maintain a green environment. From a field owner’s perspective,
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online
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shopping
permits them to run the
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business
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24x7
and without the need for any extra staff, utility bills and
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so
on. It permits them to offer
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products
at a more competitive
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price
.
As well
,
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consumers
enjoy a greater freedom to
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purchase
global
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products
from renowned websites like eBay and Amazon and compare the quality and
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price
of a
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product
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before
making a purchasing decision. Perhaps the most noticeable
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benefit
of this trend is the unparalleled opportunity it has brought for ordinary
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people
to open their
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own
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online
shops and run
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small
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businesses
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online
. It would never have happened without the boom of
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online
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business
trends.

On the other hand
,
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shopping
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online
brings
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consumers
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some
disadvantages.
Initially
, since
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people
are unable to touch or to
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see
the
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products
they want to
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buy
in reality, it is always
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hard
for them to examine the quality of these
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products
.
As a result
, they might
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purchase
the items with poor quality.
In addition
to that, as
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consumers
do not feel happy with the items they had
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bought
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online
, they tend to abandon these
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products
or don't
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use
them at all. This is definitely a waste of money.
Moreover
, the
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thing on the Internet
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often
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makes
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people
confused since there is a great number of shops on the Internet. To be specific, buyers might
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see
the same
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products
in several shops,
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but
the
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prices
for these items can be
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very
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different
, ranging from reasonable to
prohibitively
expensive
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price
.
Consequently
, they will not know which
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products
they should
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purchase
. Among the drawbacks of
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online
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shopping
, identity theft and digital scams are more common. Careless
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use
of a credit card or sensitive personal information can
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often
invite intruders and hackers to harm someone.
Finally
,
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online
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shopping
does not
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allow
someone to
physically
inspect a
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product
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before
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buying
it and this
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often
leads to customer dissatisfaction.
However
, these demerits can
easily
be avoided
by being cautious and relying on reputed brands.

In conclusion
, although
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buying
things on the Internet exerts
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some
adverse aspects, the advantages can justify these. The overwhelming
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benefits
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online
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shopping
offers far outweigh the few demerits it has. I
personally
am an
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online
shopper and I believe that this has
immensely
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improved
our freedom of
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shopping
and lifestyle.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay 2071 Describe a seaside place you like to visitYou should sayWhere it isWhat you like about itWhat you do thereWho you go there withAnd explain why you like to visit it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
585 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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