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19. s1. What do you think is the most important quality of a working environment: good leaders, good colleagues, or flexible time? v.1

19. s1. What do you think is the most important quality of a working environment: good leaders, good colleagues, or flexible time? v. 1
In the world of technology, there are few people who think that professional meetings and training arranged virtually have advantages while others think it has disadvantages. In my opinion, I believe having virtual office meetings and trainings has more benefits. I will pontificate further how the official meetings and trainings which are conducted on the internet have their own pros and cons On the one hand, many offices have their business meetings and trainings virtually so employees can attend them from all over the world. In other words, daily targets are not affected as they will be sitting at their desk and attending meetings or trainings. Secondly, employers do not have to arrange employees in every office to conduct meetings or trainings. For instance, an employee who is working in Mumbai can attend training or meeting anywhere in the world. On the other hand, despite having merits there are some demerits. Due to the concept of virtual meeting and training, employees will never get a chance to interact with each other face to face and will never know who their team members or office colleagues are. Furthermore, employees can lose track about the agenda of meeting or training because they can get distracted easily by their work. In my opinion, business workers should attend their meetings and training online to be more productive in their workplace and will not miss on important schedules. For example, if there is a virtual training an employee can concentrate on his training and work simultaneously. To recapitulate, offices should emphasise more on virtual meetings and trainings so daily routine is not disturbed. Also, employees will be more flexible doing their daily activities.
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training
arranged
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have advantages while others
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it has disadvantages. In my opinion, I believe having virtual
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office
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meetings
and
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trainings
has more benefits. I will pontificate
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how the official
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trainings
which
are conducted
on the internet have their
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pros and
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cons


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have their business
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trainings
virtually
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employees
can attend them from all over the world. In
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as they will be sitting at their desk and attending
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.
Secondly
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to conduct
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employee
who is working in Mumbai can attend
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training
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anywhere in the world.

On the
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hand, despite having merits there are
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demerits. Due to the concept of virtual
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,
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employees
will never
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get
a chance to interact with each
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face to face and will never know who their team members or
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colleagues are.
Furthermore
,
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employees
can lose
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about the agenda of
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because
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get
distracted
easily
by their work.

In my opinion, business workers should attend their
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meetings
and
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training
online to be more productive in their workplace and will not miss on
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important
schedules.
For example
, if there is a virtual
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training
an
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employee
can concentrate on his
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training
and work
simultaneously
.

To recapitulate,
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offices
should
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more on virtual
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meetings
and
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trainings
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so
daily routine is not disturbed.
Also
,
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employees
will be more flexible doing their daily activities.
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IELTS essay 19. s1. What do you think is the most important quality of a working environment: good leaders, good colleagues, or flexible time? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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