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7. Some students go directly to the teacher with questions about their course work. Others prefer to ask their classmates first. Which do you prefer? v.1

7. Some students go directly to the teacher with questions about their course work. Others prefer to ask their classmates first. Which do you prefer? v. 1
People do understand how critical environment is to us. There has been many campaigns in the recent years, focusing on the conservation and the importance of the environment. Somehow, there are individuals who don't see it as grave concern and don't participate. May be because the hole is not on their side of the boat, but we are all sailing the same boat. Extensive measures should be carried out at different levels to promote and propagate the idea of the significance of environment. Grass root level campaigns, focusing the younger population, for example the drawing/sketch competitions at the elementary and middle schools promoting the idea of the green and healthy planet. This would infuse a sense of responsibility towards the planet from the very beginning. Government interventions to reduce the carbon footprint. For example: by rewarding the companies that are using renewable resources of energy and not fossil fuels. This creates a competition in the industry and encourages investment in energy efficient products. Each one teach one, being aware of not overusing the electricity and water. For example: Turn off the fan or air-conditioner when not in use, turn off the water tap if running unnecessarily. This can create a huge difference in the mindset of individuals and instills the idea of healthier planet in the households. In conclusion, its the duty of every individual and organisation at various levels to be vocal about the importance of the surroundings. Schools, colleges and corporate organizations play a vital role in encouraging the people to protect the Fauna and Flora. Moreover, we only have one planet and we all contribute to it and decide what kind of environment are we going to leave for the coming generations
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People
do understand how critical environment is to us. There has been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
campaigns in the recent years, focusing on the conservation and the importance of the environment. Somehow, there are individuals who don't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
it as grave concern and don't participate. May be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the hole is not on their side of the boat,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we are all sailing the same boat. Extensive measures should
be carried
out at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
levels to promote and propagate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of the significance of environment.

Grass root level campaigns, focusing the younger population,
for example
the drawing/sketch competitions at the elementary and middle schools promoting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of the green and healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
. This would infuse a sense of responsibility towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
from the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning.

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Government
interventions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the carbon footprint.
For example
: by rewarding the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
that are using renewable resources of energy and not fossil fuels. This creates a competition in the industry and encourages investment in energy efficient products.

Each one teach one, being aware of not overusing the electricity and water.
For example
: Turn off the fan or air-conditioner when not in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, turn off the water tap if running
unnecessarily
. This can create a huge difference in the mindset of individuals and instills the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of healthier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
in the households.

In conclusion
,
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its
the duty of every individual and
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organisation
at various levels to be vocal about the importance of the surroundings. Schools, colleges and corporate
Do not mix variants of the same word ('organization' and 'organisation') within a single text.
organizations
play a vital role in encouraging the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to protect the Fauna and Flora.
Moreover
, we
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only
have one
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
planet and
we all contribute to it and decide what kind of environment are we going to
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leave
for the coming generations
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IELTS essay 7. Some students go directly to the teacher with questions about their course work. Others prefer to ask their classmates first. Which do you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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