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65. Do you agree or disagree: Students should wear uniform in school? Pleaseinclude specific details and examples in your opinion. v.1

65. : Students should wear uniform in school? Pleaseinclude specific details and examples in your opinion. v. 1
Technology has changed the job culture of many and it ensures the ability to do their work outside their companies. Even though it helps people to accomplish their duties at their homes, it is not problem free. Therefore, I will discuss the pros and cons of working outside companies and clarifies that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Admittedly, it would help a many to meet their project work deadlines; what they usually struggle to achieve while working only in companies. Precisely, though they have to spend more time for their jobs, being with their family boosts their confidence and motivates them to do their tasks properly. For example, in most of the companies' employees might not be emotionally secure as they are away from their homes, which in turn distract their concentration from their duties and reduce the productivity. Therefore, allowing them to finish their works finish their projects at homes does help them to do their tasks in a relaxed manner. Nevertheless, there are certain disadvantages to working at home after their working hours in companies. Obviously, clarifications and discussions are unavoidable when it comes to jobs. For instance, employees might have confused at certain tasks if they had not got enough explanations from their bosses. Therefore, people should finish their work at their companies or else they have to face some consequences. However, inquiring about tasks is more possible through mobile phones and the internet. Admittedly, worrying about such situations is meaningless. In conclusion, I firmly believe that working at home brings more benefits to many as theare surroundeded by family members and getting more time to fulfil the task eases their lives
Technology has
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changed
the job culture of
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many
and it ensures the ability to do their
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work
outside their
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companies
.
Even though
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helps
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people
to accomplish their duties at their
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homes
, it is not problem free.
Therefore
, I will discuss the pros and cons of
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working
outside
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companies
and clarifies that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Admittedly
, it would
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help
a
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many
to
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meet
their project
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work
deadlines; what they
usually
struggle to achieve while
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working
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only
in
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companies
.
Precisely
, though they
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have to
spend more time for their jobs, being with their family boosts their confidence and motivates them to do their
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tasks
properly
.
For example
, in most of the
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companies
' employees might not be
emotionally
secure as they are away from their
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homes
, which in turn distract their concentration from their duties and
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reduce
the productivity.
Therefore
, allowing them to finish their works finish their projects at
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homes
does
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help
them to do their
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tasks
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in a relaxed manner
.

Nevertheless
, there are certain disadvantages to
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working
at home after their
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working
hours in
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companies
.
Obviously
, clarifications and discussions are unavoidable when it
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comes
to jobs.
For instance
, employees might have confused at certain
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tasks
if they had not
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got
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enough
explanations from their bosses.
Therefore
,
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people
should finish their
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work
at their
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companies
or else they
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have to
face
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some
consequences.
However
, inquiring about
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tasks
is more possible through mobile phones and the internet.
Admittedly
, worrying about such situations is meaningless.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that
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working
at home brings more benefits to
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many
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surroundeded
by family members and getting more time to fulfil the
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eases
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IELTS essay 65. : Students should wear uniform in school? Pleaseinclude specific details and examples in your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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