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646 describe a person you know who is kindyou should saywho it ishow you know this personwhat sort of person he/she isand explain why you think they are kind v.1

646 describe a person you know who is kindyou should saywho it ishow you know this personwhat sort of person he/she isand explain why you think they are kind v. 1
Our planet is increasingly turning out to be a threatened place to live in, hence it is suggested by a few that the projects like finding new planets to colonise, should be funded more comprehensively. I disagree with this narrative. It is accepted that our world is presently, facing many problems. For example, scarcity of the safe drinking water and the hiking, environmental pollutants at an alarming rate are posing a serious threat to the human existence. Therefore, keeping these growing threats in view, it perhaps seems logical that more capital should be spent to increase the efforts to find a new liveable place for the human beings. However, a huge resources have already been wasted in the futile efforts to find a new such planet that can support the human race and other living beings. Even after that, there is not a single clue available for the existence of this kind of earth as yet, and further spending money in this direction seems a sheer waste of the valuable resources. These limited finances should rather be diverted to solve the existing issues of our own earth. One such example is the investments in the reusable energy. It will preserve the remaining reserves of these energy resources that will perhaps solve some of the issues for which some people are looking for the new places to live on. Since the after-burn effects of renewable fuels are less toxic, industrial and vehicle exhausts will, therefore, prevent the environmental pollution at the same time. Even if it is thought that scientists succeed in finding such planet, the cost of shifting humans to that asteroid would be perhaps impossible because of the expenditure and the efforts involved. In conclusion, I consider that there is no need to waste finances on the useless efforts like finding a new liveable world for humans. These valuable resources should rather be consumed in dealing those problems that our earth is facing today. The governments should continue funding the space research projects, but this should not be at the cost of neglecting or stop spending on the available solutions to make our planet a better place to live in.
Our
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planet
is
increasingly
turning out to be a threatened
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place
to
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live
in,
hence
it
is suggested
by a few that the projects like finding
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new
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planets
to
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colonise
, should
be funded
more
comprehensively
. I disagree with this narrative.

It is
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accepted
that our world is
presently
, facing
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many
problems.
For example
, scarcity of the safe drinking water and the hiking, environmental pollutants at an alarming rate are posing a serious threat to the
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human
existence.
Therefore
, keeping these growing threats in view, it perhaps seems logical that more capital should
be spent
to increase the
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efforts
to find a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
liveable
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place
for the
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human
beings.

However
, a huge
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resources
have already
been wasted
in the futile
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efforts
to find a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
such
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planet
that can support the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
race and other living beings. Even after that, there is not a single clue available for the existence of this kind of earth as
yet
, and
further
spending money in this direction seems a sheer waste of the valuable resources. These limited finances should
rather
be diverted
to solve the existing issues of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
earth. One such example is the investments in the reusable energy. It will preserve the remaining reserves of these energy resources that will perhaps solve
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
issues for which
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are looking for the
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new
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places
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
on. Since the after-burn effects of renewable fuels are less toxic, industrial and vehicle exhausts will,
therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the environmental pollution at the same time. Even if it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that scientists succeed in finding such
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planet
, the cost of shifting
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humans
to that asteroid would be perhaps impossible
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because
of the expenditure and the
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efforts
involved.

In conclusion
, I consider that there is no need to waste finances on the useless
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efforts
like finding a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
liveable world for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
humans
. These valuable resources should
rather
be consumed
in dealing those problems that our earth is facing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should continue funding the space research projects,
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but
this should not be at the cost of neglecting or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
spending on the available solutions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our
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planet
a better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 646 describe a person you know who is kindyou should saywho it ishow you know this personwhat sort of person he/she isand explain why you think they are kind v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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