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#62 What do you want most in a friend – someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of humor, or someone who is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice. v.2

#62 What do you want most in a friend – someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of humor, or someone who is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice. v. 2
Almost all person in the world need friends. A variety of people hold different opinions in choosing friends. Some consider intelligence as the most important characteristics in their friends, others regard kindness as the most significant personality. As far as I am concerned, reliability, which means faith, confidence and trust, is of vital importance. Then, I attach importance to a sense of humor as well. The reasons are as follows. Firstly, based on reliability, friendship can be lasting. On the one hand, when your friends are faithful, you would love to get in close touch with them. For instance, you could reveal your secrets to them without worry about being betrayed, and tell them your pleasure so as to double the joys. On the other hand, when you are reliable to your friends, they would also like to keep relationship between each other. Undoubtedly, you will be frequently invited to friends’ get-togethers and discussions in which your opinions will be fully taken into consideration since your friends respect you and know your suggestion does good not only to yourself but also to them as well. Thus, willing of both your friends and you in order to continue the formed friendship will lead to your perpetual friendship. Secondly, reliability makes real friendship more solid and deeper. Take borrowing money as example, it is almost completely sure that, probably besides your family, people you ask for money are your most reliable friends. You turn to them because you trust their sincerity to give you help, and at the same time, they exert themselves to meet your need because they are confident of your attitude to your friendship, to be more specific, your promise to repay money. Friendship between those friends and you, thereby, gets further development and finally becomes really invaluable friendship just in coincide with the old saying - a friend in need is a friend indeed. Further, humor is also very important character of a person because a person who is humorous can always bring you happiness. I have a friend, who is not always intelligent and reliable, but he is one of my best friends just because he has a good sense of humor. Whenever you call him, talk with him, he always tells you some funny jokes that make you laughing. Even though you are in a very bad mood, he can make you laugh and forget the sad things. A friend with a good sense of humor is very optimistic and can make your world full of light. In conclusion, reliability can be a norm to exam the real friendship and motivate people to deepen their friendship. Sence of humor is also important character among good friends. When I choose my friends, reliability and sence of humor are the foremost factors to be considered. Not only should my friends be reliable to our friendship with sence of humor, but also I should do too.
Almost all person in the world need
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friends
. A variety of
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people
hold
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different
opinions in choosing
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friends
.
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Some
consider intelligence as the most
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important
characteristics in their
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friends
, others regard kindness as the most significant personality. As far as I
am concerned
,
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reliability
, which means faith, confidence and trust, is of vital importance. Then, I attach importance to a sense of
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humor
as well
. The reasons are as follows.

Firstly
, based on
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reliability
,
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friendship
can be lasting. On the one hand, when your
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friends
are faithful, you would
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love
to
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get
in close touch with them.
For instance
, you could reveal your secrets to them without worry about
being betrayed
, and
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tell
them your pleasure
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
double the joys.
On the other hand
, when you are
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reliable
to your
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friends
, they would
also
like to
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keep
relationship between each other.
Undoubtedly
, you will be
frequently
invited to
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friends’
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get
-togethers and discussions in which your opinions will be
fully
taken into consideration since your
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friends
respect you and know your suggestion does
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good
not
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only
to yourself
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but
also
to them
as well
.
Thus
, willing of both your
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friends
and you in order to continue the formed
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friendship
will lead to your perpetual friendship.

Secondly
,
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reliability
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makes
real
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friendship
more solid and deeper. Take borrowing money as example, it is almost completely sure that,
probably
besides
your family,
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people
you
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ask for
money are your most
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reliable
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friends
. You turn to them
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because
you trust their sincerity to give you
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help
, and at the same time, they exert themselves to
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meet
your need
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because
they are confident of your attitude to your
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friendship
, to be more specific, your promise to repay money.
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Friendship
between those
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friends
and you, thereby,
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gets
further
development and
finally
becomes
really
invaluable
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friendship
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just
in coincide with the
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old
saying
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-
a
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friend
in need is a
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friend
indeed
.

Further
,
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humor
is
also
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very
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important
character of a person
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because
a person who is humorous can always bring you happiness. I have a
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friend
, who is not always intelligent and
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reliable
,
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but
he is one of my best
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friends
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just
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because
he has a
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good
sense of
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humor
. Whenever you call him, talk with him, he always
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tells
you
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some
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funny
jokes that
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make
you laughing.
Even though
you are in a
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very
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bad
mood, he can
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make
you laugh and forget the sad things. A
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friend
with a
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good
sense of
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humor
is
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very
optimistic and can
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make
your world full of light.

In conclusion
,
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reliability
can be a norm to exam the real
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friendship
and motivate
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people
to deepen their
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friendship
.
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Sence
of
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humor
is
also
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important
character among
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good
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friends
. When I choose my
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friends
,
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reliability
and
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sence
of
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humor
are the foremost factors to
be considered
. Not
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only
should my
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friends
be
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reliable
to our
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friendship
with
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sence
of
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humor
,
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but
also
I should do too.
22Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay #62 What do you want most in a friend – someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of humor, or someone who is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
487 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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