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609 do you think that any recent changes in the way people live have affected general shopping habits why? v.1

609 do you think that any recent changes in the way people live have affected general shopping habits why? v. 1
In today's society, many people prefer shopping online for items such as books, air tickets, and groceries. This essay will discuss how shopping this way is more beneficial than drawbacks. One commonly cited disadvantage of buying on the internet is the barrier of examining the quality of a product. Since consumers are unable to see or touch the items they want to buy in reality, they may end up purchasing poor quality products with high cost. For instance, If a consumer is not happy with the items they have bought, they will not use them at all, which is a waste of money. Despite this, there are several significant advantages to shopping online. First of all, purchasing on websites gives you unlimited choices. There is no physical space limitation on the internet platform; therefore, the variety for a single item is endless. In addition, there are many websites which you can access and compare the price, the shipping costs, and extra features. One such website is Ebay which contains numerous products that you can select and compare to another brand for specification and price range. Furthermore, buying things on the Internet helps people save a great deal of time. That is to say, most people are busy with their work and study, so online shopping is a wise choice that does not require them to travel to stores. As a result, it saves energy costs as well. With just a click, the shippers will deliver their products to the customers as soon as possible. To conclude, although there are drawbacks to buying products on the internet, it is clear that online shopping benefits people by offering them countless products and saving valuable time. On balance, I would argue that shopping on the internet is beneficial to any individual.
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today
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many
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people
prefer
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shopping
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online
for
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items
such as books, air tickets, and groceries. This essay will discuss how
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shopping
this way is more beneficial than drawbacks.

One
commonly
cited disadvantage of buying on the internet is the barrier of examining the quality of a
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product
. Since consumers are unable to
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see
or touch the
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items
they want to
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buy
in reality, they may
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end
up purchasing poor quality
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products
with high cost.
For instance
, If a consumer is not happy with the
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items
they have
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bought
, they will not
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use
them at all, which is a waste of money.

Despite this, there are several significant advantages to
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shopping
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online
.
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First of all
, purchasing on websites gives you unlimited choices. There is no physical space limitation on the internet platform;
therefore
, the variety for a single
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item
is endless.
In addition
, there are
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many
websites which you can access and compare the price, the shipping costs, and extra features. One such website is
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Ebay
which contains numerous
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products
that you can select and compare to another brand for specification and price range.
Furthermore
, buying things on the Internet
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helps
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people
save a great deal of time.
That is
to say, most
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people
are busy with their work and study,
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so
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online
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shopping
is a wise choice that does not require them to travel to stores.
As a result
, it saves energy costs
as well
. With
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just
a click, the shippers will deliver their
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products
to the customers as
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soon
as possible.

To conclude
, although there are drawbacks to buying
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products
on the internet, it is
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clear
that
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online
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shopping
benefits
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people
by offering them countless
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products
and saving valuable time. On balance, I would argue that
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shopping
on the internet is beneficial to any individual.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 609 do you think that any recent changes in the way people live have affected general shopping habits why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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