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5. s2. Some people like to have a break or get a job during summer vacation. Others think it is better to take a class. Which do you prefer and why? v.1

5. s2. Some people like to have a break or get a job during summer vacation. Others think it is better to take a class. Which do you prefer and why? v. 1
Air pollution has now become a major health hazard for all countries. While some people support that restricting air traffic is the only solution to curtail pollution of air, others maintain that other methods should be implemented to control air pollution. The rapid growth of manufacturing and the automotive industry was the major development of last twenty years. This trend has undoubtedly created more and more factories across the world, which has now become the major source of pollution of environment and air. Moreover, the number of cars and trucks on the streets have multiplied exponentially over the past decade. However, studies show that number of air planes used by global airline industry has not increased. So, even if tough restrictions are imposed on air travel, air pollution cannot be prevented by that measure. Despite the impracticality of banning air travel, some people think that air pollution can be eliminated by grounding all the air planes. What they don't understand is that the aeronautical fuel is one of the most efficient fuel in the world. Combustion of these fuels doesn't create any pollutants during air travel. Studies show that only one percent of air pollution is created by air traffic. As air travel is not a significant source of air pollution, it should not be restricted. To conclude, this essay discussed why the restriction of air travel cannot prevent air pollution. In my opinion, air planes are not a major source of air pollution and, therefore air traffic need not be restricted to keep the air clean.
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support that restricting
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, others maintain that other methods should
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pollution.

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major
development of last twenty years. This trend has
undoubtedly
created more and more factories across the world, which has
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now
become the
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.
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, it should not
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.

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IELTS essay 5. s2. Some people like to have a break or get a job during summer vacation. Others think it is better to take a class. Which do you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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