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20. Many universities offer intensive courses during the summer and winter periods. Would you prefer to take an intensive course during the summer or the winter vacationperiod? v.1

20. Many universities offer intensive courses during the summer and winter periods. Would you prefer to take an intensive course during the summer or the winter vacationperiod? v. 1
It is argued by some people that environmental protection is the responsibility of the government, while others believe that each person has an important role to play rather than the authorities. Although the government can enact legislations to protect the environment, I believe that the government cannot control the actions of everybody in an effort to preserve our surroundings. On the one hand, some people believe that since it is only the government that can enact environmental legislations, they are the only one tasked with the role of protecting the environment. Various authorities make laws in an effort to ensure the conservation of natural resources, control of pollution and prevention of environmental degrading activities such as overgrazing, deforestation and indiscriminate disposal of waste. For instance, some state authorities in Nigeria setup regulations geared towards reducing industrial waste and fine industries that fall short of these laws. This shows the impact the governments have in protecting our environment from degradation. On the other hand, some people are of the view that the government cannot oversee the activities of all their citizens. Thus, each person should be responsible for protecting the environment due to the fact that everyone can make personal efforts to protect the environment. For instance, an individual may decide to buy only biodegradable packaging items so that the environment can be conserved. Therefore, an individual has a greater impact in the effort to ensure environmental conditions that are sustainable. I support this view. In conclusion, although the government can make laws so as to protect the environment, it cannot control the activities of everyone. Therefore, I believe that everyone had a responsibility to protect the environment.
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environmental
protection is the responsibility of the
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government
, while others
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believe
that each person has an
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important
role to play
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than the authorities. Although the
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government
can enact
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legislations
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protect
the
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environment
, I
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believe
that the
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government
cannot control the actions of everybody in an
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effort
to preserve our surroundings.

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people
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believe
that since it is
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government
that can enact
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environmental
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legislations
, they are the
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only
one tasked with the role of protecting the
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environment
. Various authorities
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make
laws in an
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effort
to ensure the conservation of natural resources, control of pollution and prevention of
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environmental
degrading activities such as overgrazing, deforestation and indiscriminate disposal of waste.
For instance
,
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some
state authorities in Nigeria setup regulations geared towards reducing industrial waste and fine industries that fall short of these laws. This
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shows
the impact the
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governments
have in protecting our
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environment
from degradation.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
are of the view that the
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government
cannot oversee the activities of all their citizens.
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, each person should be responsible for protecting the
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environment
due to the fact that everyone can
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make
personal
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efforts
to
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protect
the
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environment
.
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, an individual may decide to
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buy
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only
biodegradable packaging items
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so
that the
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environment
can
be conserved
.
Therefore
, an individual has a greater impact in the
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effort
to ensure
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environmental
conditions that are sustainable. I support this view.

In conclusion
, although the
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government
can
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make
laws
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protect
the
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environment
, it cannot control the activities of everyone.
Therefore
, I
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believe
that everyone had a responsibility to
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protect
the
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environment
.
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IELTS essay 20. Many universities offer intensive courses during the summer and winter periods. Would you prefer to take an intensive course during the summer or the winter vacationperiod? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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