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5. Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

5. Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians or plumbers. v. 1
The frenzy over crime shows in recent years has led many to question both the origins of this morbid interest and its impact. In my opinion, people watch these shows to dispel or safely confirm psychological similarities with the killers and the result for society will be negligible in most cases. The reason people watch crime shows is to understand and compare the psychology of killers. The mystery of these shows goes deeper than figuring out which suspect is the real perpetrator. Audiences are chiefly concerned with the motive and the best shows analyse compelling, complex personality archetypes. People can then try to parse out whether or not these individuals are driven by human nature and are just expressing their desires differing from law-abiding citizens or if they are qualitatively different from the average person. Some watches to try to unequivocally differentiate themselves while others experience a guilty, unconscious pleasure in identification and vicarious living. The end result of all these shows related to crime will amount to nothing in the final analysis. There will be some exceptions where individuals develop an unhealthy obsession that isolates them from normal society or claim them as excuses for their own crimes, but this is just as likely to occur with any form of entertainment. The majority of people watch these shows, think about them and talk about them just as they discuss a book or a sports team. Research has been unable to show any direct link between watching crime shows and committing crimes or altering one’s outlook towards others. Similarly, they will not have a positive impact since most people do not watch them to get tips to avoid criminals and the sample sizes for the crimes taking place are too small relative to the knowledge gained. In conclusion, people watch crime shows to exonerate or convict themselves and it is a benign obsession. It is more important for psychologists to examine the drive to fascination than its object.
The frenzy over
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in recent years has led
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to question both the origins of this morbid interest and its impact. In my opinion,
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people
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watch
these
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to dispel or
safely
confirm psychological similarities with the killers and the result for society will be negligible
in most cases
.

The reason
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people
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crime
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is to understand and compare the psychology of killers. The mystery of these
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shows
goes deeper than figuring out which suspect is the real perpetrator. Audiences are
chiefly
concerned with the motive and the best
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shows
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analyse
compelling, complex personality archetypes.
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People
can then try to parse out
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whether or not
these individuals
are driven
by human nature and are
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expressing their desires differing from law-abiding citizens or if they are
qualitatively
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different
from the average person.
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Some
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watches
to try to
unequivocally
differentiate themselves while others experience a guilty, unconscious pleasure in identification and vicarious living.

The
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result of all these
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related to
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will amount to nothing in the final analysis. There will be
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exceptions where individuals develop an unhealthy obsession that isolates them from normal society or claim them as excuses for their
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own
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crimes
,
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this is
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as likely to occur with any form of entertainment. The majority of
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these
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,
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about them and talk about them
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as they discuss a book or a sports team. Research has been unable to
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any direct link between watching
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crime
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and committing
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or altering one’s outlook towards others.
Similarly
, they will not have a
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positive
impact since most
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people
do not
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them to
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tips to avoid criminals and the sample sizes for the
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crimes
taking place are too
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small
relative to the knowledge gained.

In conclusion
,
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to exonerate or convict themselves and it is a benign obsession. It is more
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for psychologists to examine the drive to fascination than its object.
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IELTS essay 5. Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians or plumbers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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