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539 describe a book you have recently readyou should saywhat kind of book it iswhat it is aboutwhat sort of people would enjoy itand explain why you liked it v.1

539 describe a book you have recently readyou should saywhat kind of book it iswhat it is aboutwhat sort of people would enjoy itand explain why you liked it v. 1
It is believed by many people that having a higher education at university or college is the most suitable medium to be a successful professional, however, there are others who think that getting a job, just after completing the school education, is better for a bright career. In my opinion, the decision of getting a professional degree should entirely depend on the type of profession, one is willing to join. On the one hand, a college education does not seem beneficial to the student who wants to run their family business. As such children learn most of the business skills from their parents itself. During the growing years, most of the children start involving themselves in their family business and getting knowledge from their parents. Therefore, any formal education will not be of much use for them and they can handle the business on the basis of experience, without having any formal degree or certificates. On the other hand, there are certain professions for which college education is must. In other words, many professions such as doctors and advocate requires professional education certificates. For instance, M. B. B. S degree is a prerequisite for any doctor and likewise, an advocate must hold a law degree. One cannot learn these skills in schools or from family. Therefore, going to university is the only way to become a professional in such fields. In conclusion, university education is necessary for a few professions while it is not mandatory for others who wanted to join the family business. Thus, decision of getting a higher degree entirely depends on the type of profession one is going to choose in the future.
It
is believed
by
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many
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people
that having a higher
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education
at university or college is the most suitable medium to be a successful
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professional
,
however
, there are others who
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think
that getting a job,
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just
after completing the school
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education
, is better for a bright career. In my opinion, the decision of getting a
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professional
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degree
should
entirely
depend on the type of
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profession
, one is willing to
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join
.

On the one hand, a college
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education
does not seem beneficial to the student who wants to run their
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family
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business
.
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As
such children learn most of the
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business
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skills
from their parents itself. During the growing years, most of the children
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start
involving themselves in their
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family
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business
and getting knowledge from their parents.
Therefore
, any formal
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education
will not be of much
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use
for
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them and
they can handle the
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business
on the basis of experience, without having any formal
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degree
or certificates.

On the
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other
hand, there are certain
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professions
for which college
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education
is
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must
. In
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other
words,
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many
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professions
such as doctors and advocate requires
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professional
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education
certificates.
For instance
, M. B. B. S
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degree
is a prerequisite for any doctor and
likewise
, an advocate
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must
hold a law
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degree
. One cannot learn these
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skills
in schools or from
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family
.
Therefore
, going to university is the
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only
way to become a
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professional
in such fields.

In conclusion
, university
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education
is necessary for a few
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professions
while it is not mandatory for others who wanted to
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join
the
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family
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business
.
Thus
, decision of getting a higher
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degree
entirely
depends on the type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
profession
one is going to choose in the future.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 539 describe a book you have recently readyou should saywhat kind of book it iswhat it is aboutwhat sort of people would enjoy itand explain why you liked it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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