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501 some people say that people help others in the community more now than they did in the past? agree /disagree v.1

501 some people say that people help others in the community more now than they did in the past? agree /disagree v. 1
Inventors are considered to be not much crucial than doctors. Each profession, whether it is in services related to medical, engineering, technology, art and craft are all crucial for the existence of this universe. We all are dependent on each other in one or the other way. I believe that being a doctor is as important as being an inventor and hence, firstly this essay will prove the importance of inventors and then the importance of doctors. Today, we are living luxurious lives is all because of the various inventions that happened in the recent years. For instance, firstly, lets take very basic invention that changed the way people can travel from one part of the country to another are aeroplanes, and thus increased business among the countries at very fast rates. Moreover, other inventions like telephones actually helped mankind to connect with each other maybe sitting at the opposite ends of the world. With telephones various other facilities are invented like messaging, video calls etc. Hence, we can say that inventions proved to be very crucial for us as a society. Alternatively, medical science is as important as inventors, the same helped us to live longer and healthier lives. Doctors are known to be the second god, its because they can save lives by giving second birth to people facing with destructive conditions. Various inventions like heart surgeries, dialysis proved to be the saviour for many who are struggling with life fatals, and hence are important for mankind. In the conclusion, I would say that both doctors and inventors are equally important and I think they are also complementary to each other as medical science cannot run without inventions and inventors cannot do anything without medical science, therefore, both are vital for subsistence of human life.
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Inventors
are considered
to be not much
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crucial
than
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doctors
. Each profession, whether it is in services related to
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medical
, engineering, technology, art and craft are all crucial for the existence of this universe. We all are dependent on each
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other
in one or the
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other
way. I believe that being a
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doctor
is as
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important
as being an
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inventor
and
hence
,
firstly
this essay will prove the importance of
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inventors
and then the importance of doctors.

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Today
, we are living luxurious
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lives
is all
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because
of the various inventions that happened in the recent years.
For instance
,
firstly
,
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lets
take
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very
basic invention that
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changed
the way
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people
can travel from one part of the country to another are
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aeroplanes
, and
thus
increased business among the countries at
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very
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fast
rates.
Moreover
,
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other
inventions like telephones actually
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helped
mankind to connect with each
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other
maybe sitting at the opposite ends of the world. With telephones various
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other
facilities
are invented
like messaging, video calls etc.
Hence
, we can say that inventions proved to be
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very
crucial for us as a society.

Alternatively
,
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medical
science is as
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important
as
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inventors
, the same
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helped
us to
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live
longer and healthier
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lives
.
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Doctors
are known
to be the second god, its
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because
they can save
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lives
by giving second birth to
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people
facing with destructive conditions. Various inventions like heart surgeries, dialysis proved to be the
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saviour
for
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many
who are struggling with life
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fatals
, and
hence
are
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important
for mankind.

In the conclusion, I would say that both
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doctors
and
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inventors
are
equally
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important
and I
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think
they are
also
complementary to each
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other
as
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medical
science cannot run without inventions and
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inventors
cannot do anything without
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medical
science,
therefore
, both are vital for subsistence of human life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 501 some people say that people help others in the community more now than they did in the past? agree /disagree v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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