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5 There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper Do you think it is a positive or negative development v.1

5 There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper Do you think it is a positive or negative development v. 1
With the advent of technology, new innovative products are coming on the market. These are of utmost importance in the busy life today. Precooked food is one of such products. It helps to fulfil the hunger of many. Therefore, there are a large number of benefits of such foodstuff. Nowadays, there are quite a good amount of the population living away from home in the hostel, flat etc. Canned edible items like biscuits, juice, cookies, chips etc. Serve as an interim relief for these beings. In metropolitan cities, distances are too long, and it is difficult to find home cooked products all the time. Processed meals seem to be a boon in the hour of need. In addition to this, individuals who do not know cooking can easily pack their stomach. Like every product on the earth, this too has its own pros and cons. Expiry date is one of the disadvantages, a person has to check the validity of the item always while purchasing. In addition to this, the quality of the eatable is also a matter of concern for many. For instance the recent survey by "The Times" on the fast food revealed that 90% of the dehydrated refreshments contains extra fat and is deprived of essential nutrients required for a healthy body. Consequently, the ratio of obese humans is shooting with the time and queue of heart patients outside the hospitals is rising. By comparing the gains and losses, everyone can clearly see that the negatives override the positives. In conclusion, yes the obstacles due to frozen cuisines prevail over the corresponding strengths. Keeping the lethargic attitude on the side, use of fresh eatables must be appreciated and promoted.
With the advent of technology, new innovative
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products
are coming on the market. These are of utmost importance in the busy life
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today
. Precooked food is one of such
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products
. It
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helps
to fulfil the hunger of
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many
.
Therefore
, there are
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a large number of
benefits of such foodstuff.

Nowadays, there are quite a
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good
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amount
of the population living away from home in the hostel, flat etc. Canned edible items like biscuits, juice, cookies, chips etc. Serve as an interim relief for these beings. In metropolitan cities, distances are too long, and it is difficult to find home cooked
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
all the time. Processed meals seem to be a boon in the hour of need.
In addition
to this, individuals who do not know cooking can
easily
pack their stomach.

Like every
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product
on the earth, this too has its
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own
pros and cons. Expiry date is one of the disadvantages, a person
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has to
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check
the validity of the item always while purchasing.
In addition
to this, the quality of the eatable is
also
a matter of concern for
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many
.
For instance
the recent survey by
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The Times
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"
on the
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fast
food revealed that 90% of the dehydrated refreshments contains extra
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fat
and
is deprived
of essential nutrients required for a healthy body.
Consequently
, the ratio of obese humans is shooting with the time and queue of heart patients outside the hospitals is rising.

By comparing the gains and losses, everyone can
clearly
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see
that the negatives override the positives.

In conclusion
, yes the obstacles due to frozen cuisines prevail over the corresponding strengths. Keeping the lethargic attitude on the side,
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use
of fresh eatables
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must
be appreciated
and promoted.
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IELTS essay 5 There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper Do you think it is a positive or negative development v. 1

Essay
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5 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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