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5. In most parts of the United States, the driving age is 16 years, but in some rural areas, it is 14 years. Give your opinion of this situation. v.1

5. In most parts of the United States, the driving age is 16 years, but in some rural areas, it is 14 years. Give your opinion of this situation. v. 1
In recent years, obtaining foreign education as part of their degree is increasingly becoming a trend amongst college students. Although the overseas study can expose students to diverse languages and cultures that might be of significant benefit to them later in their careers, it could also be challenging for them to adapt to a new way of life. In my opinion, students are better off having studied in a different nation, despite the challenges they will inevitably face. The greatest benefit of studying abroad is that students will often learn new languages. The mode of learning in a country is usually its native language which students are expected to understand so effective learning can take place. For example, a student whose mother tongue is Spanish could opt to attend university in England so as to learn how to communicate in English language. Learning a foreign language is undoubtedly the main advantage of studying overseas because it makes you gain the ability to speak in other tongues. Additionally, studying abroad gives students the opportunity to have a first hand experience of a culture totally different from their own. In contrast, being in an unfamiliar zone in a new location can often cause culture shock to a person. The differences in culture may pose to be a barrier that could make integration into a new environment difficult. For instance, a student from a liberal region will find it hard to conform to laws that govern citizens of a conservative society. The negative effects of studying abroad will make it difficult for students in overseas universities to adapt easily. In summary, there is a significant increase in studying overseas. Though students will have to cope with differences in cultural heritage, the practical exposure to new languages and social standings will be greatly beneficial to them. As a result, the benefits of studying in another country far outweigh the disadvantages.
In recent years, obtaining foreign education as part of their degree is
increasingly
becoming a trend amongst college
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students
. Although the
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overseas
study can expose
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students
to diverse
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languages
and
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cultures
that might be of significant benefit to them later in their careers, it could
also
be challenging for them to adapt to a
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new
way of life. In my opinion,
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students
are better off having studied in a
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different
nation, despite the challenges they will
inevitably
face.

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studying
abroad is that
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students
will
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often
learn
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new
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languages
. The mode of learning in a country is
usually
its native
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language
which
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students
are
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expected
to understand
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so
effective learning can take place.
For example
, a
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student
whose mother tongue is Spanish could opt to attend university in England
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so as to
learn how to communicate in English
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language
. Learning a foreign
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language
is
undoubtedly
the main advantage of
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studying
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overseas
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because
it
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makes
you gain the ability to speak in other tongues.

Additionally
,
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studying
abroad gives
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students
the opportunity to have a
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first hand
experience of a
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culture
totally
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different
from their
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own
.

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, being in an unfamiliar zone in a
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new
location can
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often
cause
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culture
shock to a person. The differences in
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culture
may pose to be a barrier that could
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make
integration into a
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new
environment difficult.
For instance
, a
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student
from a liberal region will find it
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hard
to conform to laws that govern citizens of a conservative society. The
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negative
effects of
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studying
abroad will
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make
it difficult for
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students
in
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overseas
universities to adapt
easily
.

In summary, there is a significant increase in
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studying
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overseas
. Though
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students
will
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have to
cope with differences in cultural heritage, the practical exposure to
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new
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languages
and social standings will be
greatly
beneficial to them.
As a result
, the benefits of
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studying
in another country far outweigh the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay 5. In most parts of the United States, the driving age is 16 years, but in some rural areas, it is 14 years. Give your opinion of this situation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
316 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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