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45. Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. v.2

45. Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. v. 2
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects about travelling alone or with companion. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely prefer to travel with my friends. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, if you travel with friends, you will be much happier, because in the evenings you can play different table games with your friends, which will supply you by positive emotions. Friends are the most important people in our life, that’s why the time spending with friends is magic time. I have to attend that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, last year I went to Yerevan with my friends for a week. In the evenings we had a sit around fireplace, which was on the top stage of our hotel, and played different table games. I can’t even explain the feelings that I had during that time period. As a result we came back to our houses with unlimited supply of positive energy and unbelieveble feelings. For this reason I think that travelling with a companion is better than take a trip alone. Secondly, during travelling with companion, you can exchange your minds with other people. Mostly 90% of successful projects was born in those conditions. During your trip you can tell about your minds and your projects to your friends and discuss them with them. Drawing from my own experience last week we went to Tsakhadzor with my friends. I told them about my project, which I wanted to start in a month, and we started to discuss the perspectives of that. Moreover we created a strategy by which I need to start those projects. Its certainly clear to see that travel with companion can be productive for each of members of the group. To make a long story short, in light of above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that travelling with companion supply you with positive energy and help you to be successful on your doings.
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positive
and
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negative
aspects about
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travelling
alone or with
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companion
. If I
were forced
to choose, I would definitely prefer to travel with my
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friends
. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and I will develop these
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ideas
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, if you travel with
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friends
, you will be much happier,
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because
in the evenings you can play
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different
table games with your
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friends
, which will supply you by
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positive
emotions.
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Friends
are the most
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important
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people
in our life, that’s why the time spending with
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friends
is magic time. I
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have to
attend that my opinion on this matter has been
profoundly
influenced by my
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own
personal experience. You
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see
, last year I went to Yerevan with my
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friends
for a week. In the evenings we had a sit around fireplace, which was on the top stage of our hotel, and played
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different
table games. I can’t even
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explain
the feelings that I had during that time period.
As a result
we came back to our
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houses
with unlimited supply of
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positive
energy and
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unbelieveble
feelings.
For this reason
I
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think
that
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travelling
with a
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companion
is better than take a trip alone.

Secondly
, during
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travelling
with
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companion
, you can exchange your minds with other
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people
.
Mostly
90% of successful
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projects
was born
in those conditions. During your trip you can
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tell
about your minds and your
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projects
to your
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friends
and discuss them with them. Drawing from my
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own
experience last week we went to
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Tsakhadzor
with my
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friends
. I
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told
them about my
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project
, which I wanted to
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start
in a month, and we
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started
to discuss the perspectives of that.
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Moreover
we created a strategy by which I need to
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start
those
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projects
. Its
certainly
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clear
to
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see
that travel with
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companion
can be productive for each of members of the group.

To
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make
a long story short, in light of above mentioned reasons, I
strongly
believe that
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travelling
with
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companion
supply you with
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positive
energy and
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help
you to be successful on your doings.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay 45. Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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