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10. "When people succeed in life, it is because of hard work. Being lucky has nothing to do with success in life. " Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v.2

10. "When people succeed in life, it is because of hard work. Being lucky has nothing to do with success in life. " with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v. 2
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of people who succed in life by their hard work or by luck. If i were forced to choose, i would definitely say that hard work is the basis of success. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and i will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, hardwork is the engine for each of us. If we want to be rich, we need to work very hard to achieve our goals. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter, has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my friend was from poor family, but he wanted to be a millionaire before his twenty. So as he knew that there were 2 years untill his twenty, he started to work enormously hard. As a result after a year he opened his first firm which is a vehichle repair firm, and started his small business. Now it is a successful project, with two millions of dollars profit for a year. For this reason I think that hardworking is the most important thing in our life. Secondly, self education also an important thing i, which is also a part of hardworking. If you want to have a high salary or be smart, you need to learn a new thing every simple day. Drawing from my own experience, i wanted to be a good programmer. I took some classes but they didn' t make me a programmer. Then i started to study myself, by finding new materials for it. Moreover i texted my questions on the internet platforms, to get answers to them. Its certainly clear to see that if you want to be successful, you need to work very hard. To make a long story short, in light of above mentioned questions, i strongly belief that if a person works hard, he will be a good specialist or really a man with great ambitions.
No one can deny that there are both
positive
and
negative
aspects of
people
who
succed
in life by their
hard
work
or by luck. If
i
were forced
to choose,
i
would definitely say that
hard
work
is the basis of success. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and
i
will develop these
ideas
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To
begin
with,
hardwork
is the engine for each of us. If we want to be rich, we need to
work
very
hard
to achieve our goals. I
have to
admit that my opinion on this matter, has been
profoundly
influenced by my
own
personal experience. You
see
, my friend was from poor family,
but
he wanted to be a millionaire
before
his twenty.
So
as he knew that there were 2 years
untill
his twenty, he
started
to
work
enormously
hard
.
As a result
after a year he opened his
first
firm which is a
vehichle
repair firm, and
started
his
small
business.
Now
it is a successful project, with
two millions of
dollars profit for a year.
For this reason
I
think
that hardworking is the most
important
thing in our life.

Secondly
, self education
also
an
important
thing i, which is
also
a part of hardworking. If you want to have a high salary or be smart, you need to learn a new thing every simple day. Drawing from my
own
experience,
i
wanted to be a
good
programmer. I took
some
classes
but
they
didn&
#039; t
make
me a programmer. Then
i
started
to study myself, by finding new materials for it.
Moreover
i
texted my questions on the internet platforms, to
get
answers to them. Its
certainly
clear
to
see
that if you want to be successful, you need to
work
very
hard
.

To
make
a long story short, in light of above mentioned questions, i
strongly
belief that if a person works
hard
, he will be a
good
specialist or
really
a
man
with great ambitions.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay 10. "When people succeed in life, it is because of hard work. Being lucky has nothing to do with success in life. " with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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