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345 describe one of your friends you should say: how you methow long you have known each otherhow you spend time togetherand explain why you like this person v.1

345 describe one of your friends you should say: how you methow long you have known each otherhow you spend time togetherand explain why you like this person v. 1
It is refutable that online shopping has increased drastically over a decade. Almost everyone in the world must have made an online purchase once in their lives. Some think that the way electronic shopping is growing will eventually end up perishing the retail stores in every city. However, I disagree with the idea due to several vital reasons such as lack of trust, over priced shipping and infeasibility of online wholesale marketing. To begin with, lack of trust on web shopping prevent people from making an online shopping their first choice. Even though online stores provide a variety of products, people are sceptical about the quality provided by them. As a result, visiting traditional stores becomes their first preference, where they can check the standard of the products on the spot without having to worry about contacts to customer service in case of any issue. It is vital to consider that online- purchase can be excessively expensive due to higher shipping rate. Most of the online shopping sites charge additional shipping cost on top of taxes, despite ordering products within the country we live in, which is considerably more expensive than buying the same product in-store. Thus, in-store shopping is much more preferable by people than e-commerce. Another compelling reason is impossibilities of an online wholesale marketing. By this I mean that wholesale marketing is all about selling wholesale products and when it comes to buying products in a large quantity, people more rely on in-store purchase rather than online shopping. Apart from that, some wholesale stores lack of online shopping services and it is required to have the physical presence of these stores. For example, MVR cash and carry wholesale market does not provide e-commerce services and only in-store purchase is allowed. In conclusion, brick and mortar stores cannot be completely replaced or taken away by the online purchaser because of unreliability of online stores, unreasonable shipping charges and impossibilities of an online wholesale market. I believe that a positive trend and popularity of online shopping should continue but not by substituting brick and mortar markets completely.
It is refutable that
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online
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shopping
has increased
drastically
over a decade. Almost everyone in the world
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must
have made an
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online
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purchase
once in their
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lives
.
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Some
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think
that the way electronic
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shopping
is growing will
eventually
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end
up perishing the retail
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stores
in every city.
However
, I disagree with the
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idea
due to several vital reasons such as lack of trust, over priced
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shipping
and
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infeasibility
of
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online
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wholesale
marketing.

To
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begin
with, lack of trust on web
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shopping
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prevent
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people
from making an
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online
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shopping
their
first
choice.
Even though
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online
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stores
provide a variety of
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products
,
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people
are
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sceptical
about the quality provided by them.
As a result
, visiting traditional
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stores
becomes their
first
preference, where they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the standard of the
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products
on the spot without having to worry about contacts to customer service in case of any issue. It is vital to consider that
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online-
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purchase
can be
excessively
expensive due to higher
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shipping
rate. Most of the
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online
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shopping
sites charge additional
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shipping
cost on top of taxes, despite ordering
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products
within the country we
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live
in, which is
considerably
more expensive than buying the same
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product
in-store.
Thus
, in-store
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shopping
is much more preferable by
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people
than e-commerce.

Another compelling reason is impossibilities of an
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online
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wholesale
marketing. By this I mean that
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wholesale
marketing is all about selling
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wholesale
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products
and when it
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comes
to buying
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products
in a large quantity,
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people
more rely on in-store
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purchase
rather
than
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online
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shopping
. Apart from that,
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some
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wholesale
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stores
lack of
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online
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shopping
services and it
is required
to have the physical presence of these
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stores
.
For example
, MVR cash and carry
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wholesale
market does not provide e-commerce services and
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only
in-store
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purchase
is
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allowed
.

In conclusion
, brick and mortar
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stores
cannot be completely replaced or taken away by the
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online
purchaser
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because
of unreliability of
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online
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stores
, unreasonable
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shipping
charges and impossibilities of an
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online
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wholesale
market. I believe that a
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positive
trend and popularity of
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online
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shopping
should continue
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but
not by substituting brick and mortar markets completely.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 345 describe one of your friends you should say: how you methow long you have known each otherhow you spend time togetherand explain why you like this person v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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