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3. Do you think it is better to marry before or after the age of 30? Use reasons tosupport your response. v.1

3. Do you think it is better to marry before or after the age of 30? Use reasons tosupport your response. v. 1
Friends are the most beautiful part of our life. Everyone had made some or many friends during their schooling, high schools, workplaces and in their day to day life. Friendship is one of the relation, which a person has freedom to choose from the mass, unlike many other relations which is build upon your family structure. Few people think having like minded pals are good, whereas there are many people who are indeed the best buddies but have different thought processes. I believe that having a similar views friends can avoid conflicts, but it becomes monotonous over time. Likely, having friends with similar opinions is good to keep the friendship going. If there is any plan to do along with like thoughts friends, then the plan goes very easily and smoothly. For example, during my school days, we used to celebrate Christmas day going for an outing, accompanied by eating at a local restaurant. So, it was quite easy to decide to choose the venue for the lunch and dinner with an almost similar type of school mates. But the taste of friendship has changed over the age. Whereas, it is visible to have friends with different thoughts is always better. Every person has their own thinking process and views over a particular thing or scenario. Similar, someones friend can always help them to visualise and solve the problems, if any, whenever they need support. These multiple views lacks when you have similar types of friends. For instance, I had a plan of travelling to a hill station in the monsoon, and was stuck with the thought of driving to and fro. Suddenly, one of my friends gave me a perspective of facing difficulties while driving due to the slippery roads. I immediately postponed for the winter, which was very helpful. In conclusion, keeping similar thinking friends is good to be surrounded with for everyday life, but different minded friends will always give you a different perspective to see the thinks from a different angle. In my opinion, having friends who sometimes disagree with your views is always the best.
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are the most
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part of our life. Everyone had made
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or
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many
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friends
during their schooling, high schools, workplaces and in their
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day to day
life. Friendship is one of the relation, which a person has freedom to choose from the mass, unlike
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many
other relations which is build upon your family structure. Few
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people
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think
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like minded
pals are
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good
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people
who are
indeed
the best buddies
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have
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different
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thought
processes. I believe that
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having
a
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similar
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views
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friends
can avoid conflicts,
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but
it becomes monotonous over time.

Likely,
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having
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friends
with
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similar
opinions is
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good
to
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keep
the friendship going. If there is any plan to do along with like
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thoughts
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friends
, then the plan goes
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very
easily
and
smoothly
.
For example
, during my school days, we
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used
to celebrate Christmas day going for an outing, accompanied by eating at a local restaurant.
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So
, it was quite easy to decide to choose the venue for the lunch and dinner with an almost
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similar
type of school mates.
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But
the taste of friendship has
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changed
over the age.

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Whereas
, it is visible to have
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friends
with
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different
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thoughts
is always better. Every person has
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their
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own
thinking process and
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views
over a particular thing or scenario.
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, someones
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friend
can always
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help
them to
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visualise
and solve the problems, if any, whenever they need support. These multiple
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views
lacks when you have
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similar
types of
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friends
.
For instance
, I had a plan of travelling to a hill station in the monsoon, and
was stuck
with the
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thought
of driving to and fro.
Suddenly
, one of my
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friends
gave me a perspective of facing difficulties while driving due to the slippery roads. I immediately postponed for the winter, which was
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very
helpful.

In conclusion
, keeping
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thinking
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friends
is
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good
to
be surrounded
with for everyday life,
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but
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different
minded
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friends
will always give you a
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different
perspective to
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see
the
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thinks
from a
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different
angle. In my opinion,
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having
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friends
who
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sometimes
disagree with your
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views
is always the best.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 3. Do you think it is better to marry before or after the age of 30? Use reasons tosupport your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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