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13. What is the best excuse to give your teacher when you have not done the homework? Use reasons to support response. v.1

13. What is the best excuse to give your teacher when you have not done the homework? Use reasons to support response. v. 1
It is thought by some people that it is not advantageous to provide secondary education to children in a country where there are not enough employment options available. In my opinion, I think that education is a basic right of a child and one does not go for higher studies only to seek employment. Education plays a crucial role in overall development and growth of a person. Firstly, It is not something that is acquired only to find a job or start a career. Even a businessman needs secondary education, although it will not help him in starting any business, but it will help in enhancing his business skills. To state an example, if one businessman has technical education, then he may use new technology to grow his business even more and will always step ahead from others less educated owners. Secondly, educated youth may seek career in overseas too. Additionally, if people of a country are educated then that will help in county growth too and may help in decreasing unemployment. Educated people may start their own venture and create job options for others too. To illustrate, One graduate student in our country, started a cab facility startup with very less resources and now approx. 20000 people are working in his company. Many drivers and other management staff are working and enjoying their work. In conclusion, one should have the liberty to pursue a higher degree or any professional education as it will eventually help in individual as well as in the country’s development.
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thought
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some
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people
that it is not advantageous to provide secondary
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education
to children in a
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country
where there are not
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enough
employment options available. In my opinion, I
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think
that
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education
is a basic right of a child and one does not go for higher studies
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only
to seek employment.

Education plays a crucial role in
overall
development and growth of a person.
Firstly
, It is not something that
is acquired
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only
to find a job or
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start
a career. Even a businessman needs secondary
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education
, although it will not
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help
him in starting any business,
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but
it will
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help
in enhancing his business
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skills
. To state an example, if one businessman has technical
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education
, then he may
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use
new technology to grow his business even more and will always step ahead from others less
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educated
owners.
Secondly
,
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educated
youth may seek career in overseas too.

Additionally
, if
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people
of a
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country
are
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educated
then that will
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help
in county growth too and may
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help
in decreasing unemployment.
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Educated
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people
may
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start
their
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own
venture and create job options for others too. To illustrate, One graduate student in our
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country
,
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started
a cab facility startup with
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very
less resources and
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now
approx. 20000
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people
are working in his
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company
.
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Many
drivers and other management staff are working and enjoying their work.

In conclusion
, one should have the liberty to pursue a higher degree or any professional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
as it will
eventually
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help
in individual
as well
as in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country’s
development.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 13. What is the best excuse to give your teacher when you have not done the homework? Use reasons to support response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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