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Do you agree of disagree. In order to be well informed, a person must get information from many different news sources. v.2

Do you agree of disagree. In order to be well informed, a person must get information from many different news sources. v. 2
Television is a very important part in our society. In order to get the news, we sometimes have to watch television to get information about the events and occurrences in the world. There are a lot of news sources and channels that we can get the news from. Even though getting the information from many different sources has advantages that we can get more details in the news, personally, I would prefer to get information from one news source for two imperative reasons. To begin, getting news from different source would be waste of time. Through watching many channels, we should have time to do so since a person needs time watching channels from one to another. Take myself as an example, I am a mother for two kids and I have plenty of responsibilities such as cleaning the house, cooking for the dinner, and helping my kids with their homework, In addition, I am studying for TOEFL test. In fact, I barely find time to get news from many sources since they boradcast the news in specific time so I don' t have time to watch various channels. Instead, I focus on one source that provides me with news in my country so I allocate specific time to watch news and this would save my time. Actually, I have a lot of benefits from this because I can do my houshold work and other things. If I watch different sources, I would haven' t finished my work in home and my study. This experience taught me that we should get news from one source to save our time and manage our time effectively. Second, we should stuck with accurate source. In order to be well informed, we should concentrate on the trustful one because there are a lot of biased channels that provide us with wrong news depend on their benefits. For instance, three weeks ago, I read an article about the most independent news sources. Actually, the author asserts that there are many news sources that belong to people who give wrong news or just they are supported from these sources since they want from people their vote or they give wrong information to mislead the people. This definitely would affect the value of the news and would impact our perspective negatively. So we must pay attention about which news source is trustful and accurate so we can be well informed and in an efficient way. The reading posits to focus on one source. As we can clearly see that getting news from one source would be a good way to focus and to get good news. By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I firmly concur that a person must get information from one source to save his time and to get accurate information. I believe that getting news from one source is worthwhile and specious and we should take these advantages.
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about the
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and occurrences in the world. There are
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and
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that we can
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has advantages that we can
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in the
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for two imperative reasons.

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would be waste of
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. Through watching
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, we should have
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to do
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since a person needs
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watching
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from one to another. Take myself as an example, I am a mother for two kids and I have
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plenty
of responsibilities such as cleaning the
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, cooking for the dinner, and helping my kids with their homework,
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, I am studying for TOEFL
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. In fact, I
barely
find
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to
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news
from
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since they
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boradcast
the
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in specific
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I
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don&
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various
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.
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, I focus on one
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that provides me with
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in my country
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I allocate specific
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to
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and this would save my
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. Actually, I have
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benefits from this
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I can do my
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houshold
work and other things. If I
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, I would
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haven&
#039; t finished my work in home and my study. This experience taught me that we should
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get
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from one
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to save our
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time
and manage our
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effectively
.

Second, we should
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with accurate
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. In order to be
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well informed
, we should concentrate on the trustful one
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there are
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a lot of
biased
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channels
that provide us with
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wrong
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news
depend on their benefits.
For instance
, three weeks ago, I read an article about the most independent
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news
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sources
. Actually, the author asserts that there are
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news
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that belong to
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who give
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they
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from these
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since they want from
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vote or
they give
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wrong
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to mislead the
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people
. This definitely would affect the value of the
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and would impact our perspective
negatively
.
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we
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pay attention about which
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is trustful and accurate
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we can be
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well informed
and
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in an efficient way
. The reading posits to focus on one
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. As we can
clearly
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that getting
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would be a
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way to focus and to
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news.

By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I
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concur that a person
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from one
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to save his
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and to
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accurate
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information
. I believe that getting
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news
from one
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is worthwhile and
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specious and
we should take these advantages.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you agree of disagree. In order to be well informed, a person must get information from many different news sources. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
489 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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