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8) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

8) Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It has been argued that electronic books will completely take the place of paper books. In contrast, several people believe that physical books will have their space forever. From my perspective, printed version books are always going to continue selling. On the one hand, electronic books are more convenient since there are not volume and weight downsize, as a consequence, anyone can download them in their smartphones or their Kindle. For instance, a recent study indicated that people have been reading more during the commuting time than ever, as they do not need to carry the book to work or school anymore. Apart from that, digital books cost less than the physical version publication, due to the costs of paper, printing, and manufacturing, therefore many people would rather save money purchasing the first option. On the other hand, hardcover printed books production will never end, because some readers simply love to take notes by hand and have a record of what they have read, as a result, they can lend the book to a friend and also decorate their home. For example, a recent survey found that 84% of London readers said it is harder to develop an emotional relationship with an e-book. In addition, some individuals appreciate the feeling of turning the pages as they go throughout the book, given the fact that they are able to see how much of the book they have read, consequently, they prefer to buy hard copies. In conclusion, even though e-books have some benefits such as convenience and cost, in my opinion, traditional paper books will always have their own space in society, considering the emotional relationship created between them and the reader.
It has
been argued
that electronic
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books
will completely take the place of paper
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books
.
In contrast
, several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
will have their space forever. From my perspective, printed version
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are always going to continue selling.

On the one hand, electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are more convenient since there are not volume and weight downsize, as a consequence, anyone can download them in their smartphones or their Kindle.
For instance
, a recent study indicated that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have been reading more during the commuting time than ever, as they do not need to carry the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
to work or school anymore. Apart from that, digital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
cost less than the physical version publication, due to the costs of paper, printing, and manufacturing,
therefore
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would
rather
save money purchasing the
first
option.

On the other hand
, hardcover printed
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books
production will never
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end
,
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because
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some
readers
simply
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love
to take notes by hand and have a record of what they have read,
as a result
, they can lend the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
to a friend and
also
decorate their home.
For example
, a recent survey found that 84% of London readers said it is harder to develop an emotional relationship with an e-book.
In addition
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
individuals appreciate the feeling of turning the pages as they go throughout the
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book
,
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given
the fact that they are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
how much of the
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book
they have read,
consequently
, they prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
copies.

In conclusion
,
even though
e-books have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
benefits such as convenience and cost, in my opinion, traditional paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
will always have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
space in society, considering the emotional relationship created between them and the reader.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 8) Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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