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2. Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believes that people need to live simple lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and g v.1

2. Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believes that people need to live simple lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. 1
According to a few individuals, the better option to strengthen people's fitness is by getting more games amenities. However, some believe that this would have a small effect on a person’s health. There are many other efforts required to be fit. In my opinion, to gain good health, physical activity plays an important role; but a balanced diet is also very important to stay healthy. Everyone wants to be a fit and healthy life, so there are some efforts which; everyone needs to fulfil achieve this goal. Nowadays, many gyms open even in many buildings having their own gym, which is free of cost so people can utilize this facility. Moreover, there are many jogging tracks build in the parks or near the sea, so it all depends on you; which type of physical activity you prefer for yourself. On the other hand, a healthy diet plays a very important role to be active, these days people use to eat junk food like pizza, burger, fries all include fat, full of oil which is very dangerous for human beings and causes many health issues. For instance, a survey run by City Community USA about 85% is obese now because of unhealthy cuisine and less physical activities. So people need to stop eating carbs and fats and include health full food. The government should also take some actions to run campaigns about health awareness programs. In conclusion, for person better strength, not only physical activities require but other efforts also required which include a balanced diet.
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small
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health
. There are
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many
other efforts required to
be fit
. In my opinion, to gain
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good
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health
,
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physical
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activity
plays an
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role;
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but
a balanced diet is
also
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very
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important
to stay healthy.

Everyone wants to be a fit and healthy life,
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so
there are
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some
efforts which; everyone needs to fulfil achieve this goal. Nowadays,
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many
gyms open even in
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many
buildings having their
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own
gym, which is free of cost
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so
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people
can utilize this facility.
Moreover
, there are
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many
jogging
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tracks
build in the parks or near the sea,
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so
it all depends on you; which type of
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physical
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activity
you prefer for yourself.

On the other hand
, a healthy diet plays a
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very
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important
role to be active, these days
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people
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eat junk food like pizza, burger, fries all include
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fat
, full of oil which is
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very
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dangerous
for human beings and causes
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many
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health
issues.
For instance
, a survey run by City Community USA about 85% is obese
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now
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because
of unhealthy cuisine and less
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physical
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activities
.
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So
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people
need to
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stop
eating carbs and fats and include
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health
full food. The
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government
should
also
take
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some
actions to run campaigns about
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health
awareness programs.

In conclusion
, for person better strength, not
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only
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physical
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activities
require
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but
other efforts
also
required which include a balanced diet.
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As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay 2. Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believes that people need to live simple lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
255 words
7
Overall Band Score
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