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173. What do you think makes a bigger impression when you meet someone for the first time: your looks or your speech? Use examples and details to support your choice. v.1

173. What do you think makes a bigger impression when you meet someone for the first time: your looks or your speech? Use examples and details to support your choice. v. 1
It is often thought by many that Television is beneficial only for amusement and enjoyment, although some are of the view that television is suitable for studies. While there are contrasting views of this, In my opinion TV as a medium is appropriate only for fun and refreshment. On the one hand, people tend to believe that numerous educational programs that are beneficial to their kids are being aired on televisions. This is sometimes true due to the fact that certain programs such as logical thinking and activities provided by experts are being telecast and they are extremely helpful for a child's overall development. In recent times, Educational institutions are proposing channels such as National Geographic, Animal planet and they believe that these could be suitable for preparing thesis and other practical purposes. While there are many programs useful for studies, television cannot be considered as a main source for education. On the other hand, many argue that this is strictly for refreshment purpose due to the fact that they are purely fictional than factual. Commercials and Soap Operas are a huge hit amongst women and they consider these as their source of entertainment during their past time. Reality Shows and Sports Channels are a huge rage amongst the youth and the main reason behind this is the fact that they offer loads of fun and are highly entertaining. While certain adverts could mislead consumers, but people majorly prefer these advertisements that are aired for their shopping purpose. That said, television offers a wide variety of programs across different channels and these are being seen as a primary purpose for entertainment. To Conclude, Television as a medium does help in some way for studies and other educational purposes, but the actual and practical use of this medium is only for fun and entertainment.
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many
that
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Television
is beneficial
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only
for amusement and enjoyment, although
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some
are of the view that
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television
is suitable for studies. While there are contrasting views of this, In my opinion TV as a medium is appropriate
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only
for fun and refreshment.

On the one hand,
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people
tend to believe that numerous educational
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programs
that are beneficial to their kids are
being aired
on
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televisions
. This is
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sometimes
true due to the fact that certain
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programs
such as logical thinking and activities provided by experts are being
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telecast and
they are
extremely
helpful for a child's
overall
development. In recent times, Educational institutions are proposing channels such as National Geographic, Animal
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planet and
they believe that these could be suitable for preparing thesis and other practical
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purposes
. While there are
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many
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programs
useful for studies,
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television
cannot
be considered
as a main source for education.

On the other hand
,
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many
argue that this is
strictly
for refreshment
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purpose
due to the fact that they are
purely
fictional than factual. Commercials and Soap Operas are a huge hit amongst
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
women and
they consider these as their source of entertainment during their
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past time
. Reality
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Shows
and Sports Channels are a huge rage amongst the youth and the main reason behind this is the fact that they offer loads of fun and are
highly
entertaining. While certain adverts could mislead consumers,
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but
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people
majorly
prefer these advertisements that
are aired
for their shopping
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purpose
. That said,
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television
offers a wide variety of
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programs
across
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different
channels and these are being
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seen
as a primary
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purpose
for entertainment.

To Conclude
,
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Television
as a medium does
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help
in
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some
way for studies and other educational
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purposes
,
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but
the actual and practical
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use
of this medium is
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only
for fun and entertainment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 173. What do you think makes a bigger impression when you meet someone for the first time: your looks or your speech? Use examples and details to support your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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