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1. Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

1. Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v. 1
Some people contend that the most appropriate method to rise the safeness on roads is restrict the lowest age by law to drive vehicles such as cars, whereas others argue that there is another efficient way to increase the security on the roads. While I accept that increasing the minimum age for people to drive cars to some extent, I believe that there are other beneficial ways to reduce traffic accidents for road safety. On the one hand, I agree with the idea that raising the lowest legal age is the best approach to decline transportation accidents for some reasons. The young drivers are likely to drive cars with high speeds. For example, in Japan, people can get driver licenses when they are over 18 years old, 18 years old drivers tend to drive with so high speeds and their drivings are so dangerous. Thus, if they cannot drive cars because of the new law in terms of the minimum driving age, the roads will be safer. On the other hand, I believe that away from restricting the driving minimum age, there are several more efficient ways for road safety. The chief method lies in reducing elderly drivers to reduce transportation accidents. For instance, in Japan, the most reason why traffic accidents happen is old age drivers. Another significant way is to raise the difficulty of exams to obtain driver licenses to decrease traffic accidents. For example, Japanese people can take a driver license for only 2 weeks, including paper tests and actual driving tests, and then about 95 % citizens have it. If these tests become more complex, the population having driver licenses will decline and also the restricted population will have better driver skills; as a result, road safety will increase. In conclusion, in fact, I agree that increasing the minimum age to get driver licenses is one efficient approach due to above reasons to some extent. However, personally, I believe that reducing old driver’s population and increasing the difficulty of driver’s license exams are more beneficial methodology to reduce transportation accidents.
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contend that the most appropriate method to rise the safeness on
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roads
is
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restrict
the lowest
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age
by law to
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drive
vehicles such as
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cars
, whereas others argue that there is another efficient
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way
to increase the security on the
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roads
. While I accept that increasing the
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minimum
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age
for
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people
to
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drive
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cars
to
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some
extent, I believe that there are other beneficial
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ways
to
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reduce
traffic
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accidents
for
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road
safety.

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agree
with the
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idea
that raising the lowest legal
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age
is the best approach to decline transportation
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accidents
for
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some
reasons. The young
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drivers
are likely to
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drive
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cars
with high speeds.
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, in Japan,
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people
can
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get
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driver
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licenses
when they are over 18 years
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old
, 18 years
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old
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drivers
tend to
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drive
with
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so
high speeds and their
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drivings
are
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dangerous
.
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, if they cannot
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drive
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cars
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because
of the new law in terms of the
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minimum
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driving
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age
, the
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roads
will be safer.

On the other hand
, I believe that away from restricting the
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driving
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minimum
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age
, there are several more efficient
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ways
for
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road
safety. The chief method lies in reducing elderly
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drivers
to
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reduce
transportation
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accidents
.
For instance
, in Japan, the most reason why traffic
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accidents
happen is
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old
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age
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drivers
. Another significant
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way
is to raise the difficulty of exams to obtain
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driver
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licenses
to decrease traffic
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accidents
.
For example
, Japanese
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people
can take a
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driver
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license
for
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only
2 weeks, including paper
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tests
and actual
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driving
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tests
, and then about 95 % citizens have it. If these
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tests
become more complex, the population having
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driver
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licenses
will decline and
also
the restricted population will have better
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driver
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skills
;
as a result
,
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road
safety will increase.

In conclusion
, in fact, I
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agree
that increasing the
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minimum
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age
to
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get
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driver
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licenses
is one efficient approach due to above reasons to
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some
extent.
However
,
personally
, I believe that reducing
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old
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driver’s
population and increasing the difficulty of
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driver’s
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license
exams are more beneficial methodology to
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reduce
transportation
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accidents
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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