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Many people today find that the cost of attaining a University level education is extremely high for the students and their families What are the causes of this situation and how can governments Universities and the students themselves overcome the proble v.2

Many people today find that the cost of attaining a University level education is extremely high for the students and their families What are the causes of this situation and how can governments Universities and the students themselves overcome the proble v. 2
It is often believed by many that people who are healthy are most times characterized by the kinds of balanced meals they eat, the bodily exercises they do as well as the way and manner they disallow stress on themselves. In my opinion, ensuring personal hygiene and getting adequate rest is very essential in maintaining a good state of health. Firstly, the level of a person's personal hygiene says a lot about his healthiness. Germs and diseases are everywhere and as such, one needs to ensure that adequate cleanliness is maintained at all times to avoid infestations. A recent study showed that dirty people visit the hospital with ailments frequently than those that are conscious about their hygiene. Just like the usual saying that "cleanliness is next to godliness". In another way, people who do not value rest are often prone to sicknesses. Rest is vital in restoring the body's dessipated energy during daily activities. This can be done by enjoying sufficient sleep or having quality leisure moments. A study comparing the activities of the urban and the rural dwellers showed that the rural dwellers have more time of rest and leisure than the urban residents and in turn have a higher life expectancy rate than those in the urban centres. In conclusion, people in my country consider being healthy at all times as important, this they achieved by ensuring that a good hygiene culture and sufficient rest taking is maintained always. These are part of the of the keys to living a healthy long life.
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characterized by the kinds of balanced meals they eat, the
bodily
exercises they do
as well
as the way and manner they disallow
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stress
on themselves. In my opinion, ensuring personal
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hygiene
and getting adequate
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rest
is
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very
essential in maintaining a
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good
state of health.

Firstly
, the level of a person's personal
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hygiene
says a lot about his healthiness. Germs and diseases are everywhere and as such, one needs to ensure that adequate cleanliness
is maintained
at all
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times
to avoid infestations. A recent study
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showed
that dirty
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people
visit the hospital with ailments
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frequently
than those that are conscious about their
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hygiene
.
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like the usual saying that
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cleanliness is
next
to godliness
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In another way,
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people
who do not value
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rest
are
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often
prone to sicknesses.
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Rest
is vital in restoring the body's
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dessipated
energy during daily activities. This can
be done
by enjoying sufficient sleep or having quality leisure moments. A study comparing the activities of the urban and the rural dwellers
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showed
that the rural dwellers have more
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time
of
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rest
and leisure than the urban residents and in turn have a higher life expectancy rate than those in the urban
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centres
.

In conclusion
,
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people
in my country consider being healthy at all
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times
as
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important
, this they achieved by ensuring that a
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good
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hygiene
culture and sufficient
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rest
taking
is maintained
always. These are part
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of the of the
keys to living a healthy long life.
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IELTS essay Many people today find that the cost of attaining a University level education is extremely high for the students and their families What are the causes of this situation and how can governments Universities and the students themselves overcome the proble v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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