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1682 in what ways do the new megacities of asia, Africa and south America differ from older one such as London of new York? v.1

1682 in what ways do the new megacities of asia, Africa and south America differ from older one such as London of new York? v. 1
It is deniable that the teenagers love to follow their own rules. While there are some views that they must act as older people’s rule and the other believe they will defend against what the parents prefers. I think the children act independently is outweigh then drawback and it will be described in the following paragraphs. It is so obvious that teenagers need close care and protection till they become mature enough to recognize the outweigh and drawback of their life. The disadvantage is that the children are not able to take care of themselves independently and they must protect by parents and other family members in the right way to prevent them from any possible risk or threat. Instance, it is important for the parent to know and upbringing, their child in style to feel confident in the society and build appropriate skills to communicate and deal in the community. Furthermore, the teenagers would like to follow their own way and denied their parents’ rules. They are thinking the age gaps among two different generations. The experience shows that technology is going so fast and it will be updated day by day and impact the social and cultural lifestyle speedily. For example, now a day the teenagers prefer to read and write in the gagged such a tap or smart phone stead of handwriting or reading a book. I am agreeing that the teenagers discover the world by their own methods and bring some new phenomena in the world. In conclusion, it is important to allow the kids to grow in their own method and protect by the older in some stages. I believe the outweigh is more then draw back.
It is deniable that the
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teenagers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to follow their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. While there are
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some
views that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
act as older
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people
’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
and the other believe they will defend against what the
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parents
You should probably use "prefer".
prefers
. I
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think
the children act
independently
is
Consider using a past participle here: "outweighed".
outweigh
then drawback and it will be
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described
in the following paragraphs.

It is
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so
obvious that
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teenagers
need close care and protection till they become mature
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enough
to recognize
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'outweigh' is correct. If 'outweigh' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the outweigh
and drawback of their life. The disadvantage is that the children are not able to take care of themselves
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
independently and
they
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must
protect by
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parents
and other family members in the right way to
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prevent
them from any possible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
or threat. Instance, it is
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important
for the
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parent
to know and upbringing, their child in style to feel confident in the society and build appropriate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to communicate and deal in the community.

Furthermore
, the
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teenagers
would like to follow their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
way and denied their
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parents’
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. They are thinking the age gaps among two
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different
generations. The experience
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that technology is going
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so
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fast
and it will
be updated
day by day and impact the social and cultural lifestyle
speedily
.
For example
,
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now
a day the
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teenagers
prefer to read and write in the gagged such a tap or smart phone stead of handwriting or reading a book. I
The verb 'agreeing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
am agreeing
that the
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teenagers
discover the world by their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
methods and bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
new phenomena in the world.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the kids to grow in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
method and protect by the older in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
stages. I believe
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'outweigh' is correct. If 'outweigh' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the outweigh
is more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
then
draw back.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 1682 in what ways do the new megacities of asia, Africa and south America differ from older one such as London of new York? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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