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14. Whoever control the media also control opinion and attitude of the people and then is a little that can be done to rectify this. To what extend to you agree or disagree. v.1

14. Whoever control the media also control opinion and attitude of the people and then is a little that can be done to rectify this. v. 1
In the contemporary era, people are living in an environment with full of media. It is believed by some people that the owners of media can affect citizens' attitude and opinion via manipulating the content broadcasted on air and there is little for ordinary citizens to do to correct it.  I personally disagree with that and the essay will discuss about my disagreement. Firstly, although media tycoons have the capacity to manipulate the content broadcasted on their TV stations or magazines, the people are individual creatures and possess personal values. Their personal values and attitudes are nurtured mainly by their cultures, family backgrounds, and education they receive. For example, in China, news and entertainment shows are required to be inspected by the Chinese government in order to control the thought of Chinese citizens. However, people there remain striking to seek for their freedom and liberty without being affected by the broadcasted content. In addition, there are countless of tycoons in the press worldwide. It is a fact that the views from tycoons are sometimes various, especially regarding to controversial topics. This distinctive view might create debates among readers or audiences. Once the readers or audiences are well-educated, it is difficult to rectify personal opinions in terms of their background and education level. As a result, they might discard the negative message from the tycoons which are against their personal values or wills. Therefore, it is difficult for the press to manipulate citizens, especially the well-educated ones. In conclusion, media tycoons have their capacities to control the broadcasted content. However, it is a tough task for them to manipulate people's thoughts or views because people have their own personal values and attitudes, especially well- educated scholars. Therefore, providing education to citizens since young age will promote strong individual views and will not be affe
In the contemporary era,
people
are living in an environment with full of
media
. It
is believed
by
some
people
that the owners of
media
can affect citizens' attitude and opinion via manipulating the content
broadcasted
on air and there is
little
for ordinary
citizens
to do to correct it.  I
personally
disagree with that and the essay will
discuss about my
disagreement.

Firstly
, although
media
tycoons have the capacity to manipulate the content
broadcasted
on their TV stations or magazines, the
people
are individual creatures and possess
personal
values. Their
personal
values and attitudes
are nurtured
mainly
by their cultures, family backgrounds, and education they receive.
For example
, in China, news and entertainment
shows
are required
to
be inspected
by the Chinese
government
in order to control the
thought
of Chinese
citizens
.
However
,
people
there remain striking to seek for their freedom and liberty without being
affected
by the
broadcasted
content.

In addition
, there are
countless of tycoons
 in the press worldwide. It is a fact that the
views
from tycoons are
sometimes
various,
especially
regarding to
controversial topics. This distinctive
view
might create debates among readers or audiences. Once the readers or audiences are well-educated, it is difficult to rectify personal opinions in terms of their background and education level.
As a result
, they might discard the
negative
 message from the tycoons which are against their
personal
values or wills.
Therefore
, it is difficult for the press to manipulate
citizens
,
especially
the well-educated ones.

In conclusion
,
media
tycoons have their capacities to control the
broadcasted
content.
However
, it is a tough task for them to manipulate
people
's thoughts or
views
because
people
have their
own
personal
values and attitudes,
especially
well- educated scholars.
Therefore
, providing education to
citizens
since young age will promote strong individual
views
and will not be
affe
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay 14. Whoever control the media also control opinion and attitude of the people and then is a little that can be done to rectify this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
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