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1298 laptop Describe a mathematics class you attended at primary schoolYou should sayWhen you attended the classWhat the teacher taughtWhat you didAnd explain what you learned from the class v.1

1298 laptop Describe a mathematics class you attended at primary schoolYou should sayWhen you attended the classWhat the teacher taughtWhat you didAnd explain what you learned from the class v. 1
It is often argued that the libraries ought to have printed books for the public and money should not be spent to provide electronic gadgets and digital material to the readers. I completely disagree with this school of thought. This essay discusses that libraries must adopt the new technologies in order to help spread knowledge and to survive in a digital age. First of all, the prime purpose of libraries was to provide space and resources for people where they can go and gather the knowledge they need. This goes without saying that technological advancements change the way we learn new things. In other words, most of the latest information is available in digital format, and it is easier to search the specific information in just a few seconds rather than spending long hours reading through the books. For example, nowadays, we can search and read about a particular disease, its symptoms and cure just by searching the relevant words if the book is available in a soft copy. Thus, technology helps us learn new things in less time. Secondly, it is imperative for survival of the traditional libraries to transform into digital libraries. The new generation seems to spend more time with mobile phones and laptops so if the information is available on DVDs it is easy for them to copy the information to their laptops and carry it with them wherever they go. To exemplify, we often observe that people are reluctant to go to the traditional libraries whereas they are more willing to walk in the digital book clubs where they can find information digitally. In conclusion, I believe that in order to serve their main purpose and survive in this new age, libraries must evolve and invest in new technologies. It is predicted that future of libraries lies in the hands of technology and if sufficient efforts are not made, they may lose their standing.
It is
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often
argued that the libraries ought to have printed
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books
for the public and money should not
be spent
to provide electronic gadgets and digital material to the readers. I completely disagree with this school of
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thought
. This essay discusses that libraries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
adopt the
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new
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technologies
in order to
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help
spread knowledge and to survive in a digital age.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the prime purpose of libraries was to provide space and resources for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
where they can go and gather the knowledge they need. This goes without saying that technological advancements
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change
the way we learn
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new
things.
In other words
, most of the latest
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information
is available in digital format, and it is easier to search the specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a few seconds
rather
than spending long hours reading through the
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books
.
For example
, nowadays, we can search and read about a particular disease, its symptoms and cure
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just
by searching the relevant words if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
is available in a soft copy.
Thus
,
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technology
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us learn
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new
things in less time.

Secondly
, it is imperative for survival of the traditional libraries to transform into digital libraries. The
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new
generation seems to spend more time with mobile phones and laptops
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
is available on DVDs it is easy for them to copy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
to their laptops and carry it with them wherever they go. To exemplify, we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
observe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are reluctant to go to the traditional libraries whereas they are more willing to walk in the digital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
clubs where they can find
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
digitally
.

In conclusion
, I believe that in order to serve their main purpose and survive in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
age, libraries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
evolve and invest in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technologies
. It
is predicted
that future of libraries lies in the hands of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
and if sufficient efforts are not made, they may lose their standing.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1298 laptop Describe a mathematics class you attended at primary schoolYou should sayWhen you attended the classWhat the teacher taughtWhat you didAnd explain what you learned from the class v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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