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12. When students go to a university, many of them take a job for the first time. Some people say that this teaches them responsibility and prepares them to enterthe workforce. Others say that working distracts them from their most importanttask: studying. v.1

12. When students go to a university, many of them take a job for the first time. Some people say that this teaches them responsibility and prepares them to enterthe workforce. Others say that working distracts them from their most importanttask: studying. v. 1
It is argued that fuel-powered automobiles should be banned and replaced with electric vehicles. This essay agrees that electric cars should replace non-electric cars because it has reduced environmental impact and is cost-effective in the long run. Electric vehicles cause lesser damage to the environment when compared to non-electric vehicles. Cars that run on fuel emit huge amounts of carbon dioxide, which is one of the greenhouse gases responsible for global warming and this in turn causes climate change. Over the last decade, the production and usage of automobiles have nearly doubled. This means that the planet’s natural resources are equally declining. For example, a recent study by NASA revealed that the primary source of carbon emissions is cars and buses amounting to a total of 63%. Electricity-powered automobiles can be cheaper in the long run. Electric cars do not need to be re-fuelled every other time and the cost of maintenance is also much lower. The owner of an electric vehicle does not need to spend on frequent repairs because there it has fewer parts when compared to a non-electric automobile. To illustrate, an article in a finance magazine stated that an average person can save up to $1, 500 a year by using an electric car over one that runs on fuel. In conclusion, it is agreed that a ban should be imposed on cars that burn fossil-fuels and electric vehicles should be used instead because they are environment-friendly and can also help you save a lot of money.
It
is argued
that fuel-powered
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automobiles
should
be banned
and replaced with
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electric
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vehicles
. This essay
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agrees
that
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electric
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cars
should replace non-electric
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cars
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because
it has
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reduced
environmental impact and
is cost
-effective in the long run.

Electric
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vehicles
cause lesser damage to the environment when compared to non-electric
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vehicles
.
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Cars
that run on fuel emit huge amounts of carbon dioxide, which is one of the greenhouse gases responsible for global warming and this in turn causes climate
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change
. Over the last decade, the production and usage of
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automobiles
have
nearly
doubled. This means that the planet’s natural resources are
equally
declining.
For example
, a recent study by NASA revealed that the primary source of carbon emissions is
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cars
and buses amounting to a total of 63%.

Electricity-powered
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automobiles
can be cheaper in the long run.
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Electric
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cars
do not need to be re-fuelled every other time and the cost of maintenance is
also
much lower. The owner of an
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electric
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vehicle
does not need to spend on frequent repairs
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because
there it has fewer parts when compared to a non-electric
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automobile
. To illustrate, an article in a finance magazine stated that an average person can save up to $1, 500 a year by using an
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electric
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car
over one that runs on fuel.

In conclusion
, it is
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agreed
that a ban should
be imposed
on
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cars
that burn fossil-fuels and
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electric
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vehicles
should be
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used
instead
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because
they are environment-friendly and can
also
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help
you save
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a lot of
money.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 12. When students go to a university, many of them take a job for the first time. Some people say that this teaches them responsibility and prepares them to enterthe workforce. Others say that working distracts them from their most importanttask: studying. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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