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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. v. 3
There is a discussion around a gap year between school and university, there are those who agree and those who disagree. I believe that a gap year can be very good for a student, depending on how one uses it. There are some advantages in taking a gap year, for example, is travelling abroad, because a travel allows this person to make contact with another culture and gain new experiences. Another benefit of a gap year is that the person can get a job and develop some professional experience before joining higher education. Both a trip overseas or getting an employment, or doing both in the same year, can help one build character and responsibility, besides the knowledge gathered, and are productive ways of spending a year out of education. Nevertheless, these are some drawbacks to that must be discussed. The first one is the loss of pace in studying, as this is a problem because the student will lose the ease and speed which he could adapt to the environment of the university and having more trouble keeping up with his classes. This problem will specially aggravate if this individual does not seek productive activities throughout the year. The lost of interest in pursuing a degree at a university can be a problem as well, because the student might get acquainted with not going to school and not doing any beneficial activities. In conclusion, a gap year can be as beneficial, as harmful for the life of an individual. How advantageous it might be will fully depend on the choices of the students and what activities they will pursue during that time period.
There is a discussion around a
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between school and university, there are those who
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and those who disagree. I believe that a
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can be
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good
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, depending on how one
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it.

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advantages in taking a
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,
for example
, is travelling abroad,
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allows
this person to
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make
contact with another culture and gain new experiences. Another benefit of a
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is that the person can
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a job and develop
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some
professional experience
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before
joining higher education. Both a trip overseas or getting an employment, or doing both in the same
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, can
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one build character and responsibility,
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the knowledge gathered, and are productive ways of spending a
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out of education.

Nevertheless
, these are
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drawbacks to that
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be discussed
. The
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one is the loss of pace in studying, as this is a problem
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because
the
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student
will lose the
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ease
and speed which he could adapt to the environment of the university and having more trouble keeping up with his classes. This problem will
specially
aggravate if this individual does not seek productive activities throughout the
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year
. The lost of interest in pursuing a degree at a university can be a problem
as well
,
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because
the
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might
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get
acquainted with not going to school and not doing any beneficial activities.

In conclusion
, a
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can be as beneficial, as harmful for the life of an individual. How advantageous it might be will
fully
depend on the choices of the
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students
and what activities they will pursue during that time period.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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